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children punishment is a good idea to teach them what's wrong and what's right

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Many people consider punishment as an essential part of teaching children what is right and what is wrong. This essay is disagree with this notion and will provide the reasons to underpin this position. Firstly, people should not expect children to understand everything from the first place or be as mature as an adult. In other words, people as human beings are not perfect at all and even in the death bed there are tons of knowledge and experiences which they are not aware of. so it is necessary for us to set a reasonable expectation from people around us, specially children. secondly, the subject of training adolescent is much more complicated than just a simple punishment due to the wrong action that they have done. Important factor is providing a logical intimacy between ourselves and make them sure they always will be safe around us talking about either insecurities or problems.
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IELTS essay children punishment is a good idea to teach them what's wrong and what's right

Essay
  American English
1 paragraphs
152 words
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4.0
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Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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