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Children nowadays spend great deal of time watching television. However, television cannot replace the books as a learning tool, which is why children are less well-educated today. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement? v.1

Children nowadays spend great deal of time watching television. However, television cannot replace the books as a learning tool, which is why children are less well-educated today. with this statement? v. 1
It is undeniable that television is a major invention and has been facilitating the people in all spheres of their lives since long. Therefore, children these days are more concerned in watching television programs. However, some people contend that television can never take the place of books in the learning process and the excessive devotion towards TV make the children less intelligible. This essay will argue why the role of books is entirely necessary in order to educate the learners despite some few benefits of learning from TV. To begin with, reading books is an absolute imperative of improving reading skills. Because while reading books one could get a deeper understanding of the context and at the same time children could develop an ability to pronounce the word and to extract its clear meaning. Moreover, books are easily available related to each and every subject which could further enhance the knowledge of readers in the area in which they are particularly interested. Indeed, there have been some recorded instances of children obtained a vast knowledge and degrees by following books as a tool of learning. These few instances make it clear the place of books in an educational process as these are required to gain expertise in terms of knowledge and education. Despite this, these days television channels has been telecasting programs related to education in which some scenarios are given to the learners and they have to practice those for the completion of their required learning content. Even though these programs could make the children familiar with the different species of flora and fauna, but the potential risks of children being distracted while studying is in a higher proportion. For example, there is a TV program named as Discovery which describes the different species of animals with the visual representation, but these kind of programs are not suitable for the children of all age-groups and they may attract towards the other channels being telecasted on the TV. Overall, gaining knowledge through the TV is a limited and not worthwhile to make the children educated. To conclude, this essay argued that people who are in favour with the studies through books have an entire understanding that these are the best learning resources. In my opinion, reading books is considered to be a better way of getting an education since long and their existence will never be outdated, but some few TV programs could be helpful for the learners to gain knowledge and experience.
It is undeniable that
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television
is a major invention and has been facilitating the
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people
in all spheres of their
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lives
since long.
Therefore
,
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children
these days are more concerned in watching
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television
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programs
.
However
,
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some
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people
contend that
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television
can never take the place of
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books
in the
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learning
process and the excessive devotion towards TV
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make
the
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children
less intelligible. This essay will argue why the role of
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books
is
entirely
necessary in order to educate the learners despite
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some
few benefits of
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learning
from TV.

To
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begin
with,
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reading
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books
is an absolute imperative of improving
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reading
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skills
.
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Because
while
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reading
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books
one could
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get
a deeper understanding of the context and at the same time
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children
could develop an ability to pronounce the word and to extract its
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
clear
meaning.
Moreover
,
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books
are
easily
available related to each and every subject which could
further
enhance the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
knowledge
of readers in the area in which they are
particularly
interested.
Indeed
, there have been
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
some
recorded instances of
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children
obtained a vast
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knowledge
and degrees by following
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books
as a tool of
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learning
. These few instances
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make
it
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clear
the place of
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books
in an educational process as these
are required
to gain expertise in terms of
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knowledge
and education.

Despite this, these days
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television
channels has been telecasting
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programs
related to education in which
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some
scenarios are
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given
to the
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learners and
they
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have to
practice those for the completion of their required
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learning
content.
Even though
these
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programs
could
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make
the
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children
familiar with the
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different
species of flora and fauna,
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but
the potential
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risks
of
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children
being distracted
while studying is in a higher proportion.
For example
, there is a TV
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program
named as Discovery which
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describes
the
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different
species of animals with the visual representation,
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but
Did you mean "this kind" or "these kinds"?
these kind
of
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programs
are not suitable for the
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children
of all
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age-groups and
they may attract towards the other channels being
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telecasted
on the TV.
Overall
, gaining
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knowledge
through the TV is a limited and not worthwhile to
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make
the
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children
educated.

To conclude
, this essay argued that
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people
who are in
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favour
with the studies through
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books
have an entire understanding that these are the best
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
learning
resources. In my opinion,
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reading
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books
is considered
to be a better way of getting an education since long and their existence will never
be outdated
,
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but
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some
few TV
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programs
could be helpful for the learners to gain
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
knowledge
and experience.
8Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
8Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
8Mistakes

IELTS essay Children nowadays spend great deal of time watching television. However, television cannot replace the books as a learning tool, which is why children are less well-educated today. with this statement? v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
413 words
8
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 8.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 8.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 8.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 8.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
  • ?
    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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