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Children nowadays spend a great deal of time watching television. However, television cannot replace the book as a learning tool, which is why children are less well-educated today. v.6

Children nowadays spend a great deal of time watching television. However, television cannot replace the book as a learning tool, which is why children are less well-educated today. v. 6
In the current world, visual media has a huge presence in everyday life of people across the globe. For example, television is being widely used as a supplement for education by students. It agrees that books can never be replaced by television as a means of learning gadget. This essay will discuss about the main advantages of learning from books. First of all, TV set cannot replace the books because mostly children often misuse television. Television is the set of not only education programs, it is a set of cartoons, movies and other interactive shows. It is obvious that education programs are less attractive than the cartoon shows and other programs children prefer to watch. It means that while there are lots of educative and suitable programs, it is not unusual that a child would prefer to watch programs that entertain more than educating. As a result, by watching the entertain programs children will not learn anything, they just have a whale of time. Moreover, the television does not focus on a particular subject, whereas books are target a specific topic, which gives opportunity to learn deeply about this topic. Mostly, educational tv programs cover a wide range of topics in order to have a more viewers. It does not have any impact on kids' knowledge. If children start to read the books as a learning tool, books not only give a great amount of well-focused information for children to study and it also improve reading and writing skills. In addition, learning by tv programs makes children more lazier rather than collecting data by reading books. In conclusion, television is more entertaining than books, it cannot become a great tool for education as books are for children. The book is still the most informative and appropriate learning tool and the television can never replace it terms of the child’s education.
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world, visual media has a huge presence in everyday life of
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people
across the globe.
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television
is being
widely
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used
as a supplement for
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education
by students. It
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agrees
that
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books
can never
be replaced
by
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television
as a means of
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learning
gadget. This essay will
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discuss about the
main advantages of
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learning
from books.

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, TV set cannot replace the
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books
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because
mostly
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children
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often
misuse
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television
.
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is the set of not
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only
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education
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programs
, it is a set of cartoons, movies and other interactive
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shows
. It is obvious that
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education
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programs
are less attractive than the cartoon
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shows
and other
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programs
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children
prefer to
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watch
. It means that while there are lots of educative and suitable
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programs
, it is not unusual that a child would prefer to
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watch
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programs
that entertain more than educating.
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the entertain
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programs
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children
will not learn anything, they
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have a whale of time.

Moreover
, the
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television
does not focus on a particular subject, whereas
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books
are target a specific topic, which gives opportunity to learn
deeply
about this topic.
Mostly
, educational
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tv
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programs
cover a wide range of topics in order to have a more viewers. It does not have any impact on kids' knowledge. If
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children
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start
to read the
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books
as a
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learning
tool,
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books
not
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only
give a great amount of well-focused information for
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children
to study and it
also
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improve
reading and writing
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skills
.
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,
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learning
by
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tv
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programs
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makes
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children
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more lazier
rather
than collecting data by reading books.

In conclusion
,
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television
is more entertaining than
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books
, it cannot become a great tool for
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education
as
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books
are for
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children
. The
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book
is
still
the most informative and appropriate
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learning
tool and the
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television
can never replace it terms of the child’s
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education
.
11Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
40Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
7Mistakes

IELTS essay Children nowadays spend a great deal of time watching television. However, television cannot replace the book as a learning tool, which is why children are less well-educated today. v. 6

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
310 words
6
Overall Band Score
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