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Children nowadays spend a great deal of time watching television. However, television cannot replace the book as a learning tool, which is why children are less well‐educated today. To what extent do you agree with this statement? v.12

Children nowadays spend a great deal of time watching television. However, television cannot replace the book as a learning tool, which is why children are less well‐educated today. v. 12
With modernization of the television system, people can watch anything they wish for on their TV screens. The various applications that are available on digital screen today makes it easy for everyone to access almost everything on it. One single screen serves the purpose of a regular traditional TV, big google search engine or on demand entertainment provider. Because of this, children get attracted to their home screens and spend most of the time watching their favourites an prefer to learn new concepts by googling on the big screen. However, this device can never replace book as a learning tool. Hence, the children lack in the complete learning process. In this essay we will argue why it is pivotal to learn from books along with the digital media. On the one hand, books make the base of any learning since decades. Reading books make the offspring focus their brain on one particular framework. Furthermore, a research by Harvard says that reading books is essential to train your brain to focus on things. People who read more are expected to focus 40% more on things than those who do not read print. However, new digital learning has provided human with a great technique of developing learning, but this also gives options for them to look for new information every day. Hence, not focusing on one particular thing. To sum up, Television has widened its spectra from just entertainment to widespread learning, but it can never replace the focused learning that can only happen by concentrating on print media and with a habit of reading through books. I would suggest that digital and print media should go hand in hand to provide overall Holistic development of a juvenile to an intellectual and active adult.
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people
can
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watch
anything they wish for on their TV
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screens
. The various applications that are available on digital
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screen
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today
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makes
it easy for everyone to access almost everything on it. One single
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screen
serves the purpose of a regular traditional TV,
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big
google search engine or on demand entertainment provider.
Because of this
, children
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get
attracted to their home
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screens
and spend most of the time watching their
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favourites
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an
prefer to learn new concepts by googling on the
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big
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screen
.
However
, this device can never replace
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book
as a
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learning
tool.
Hence
, the children lack in the complete
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learning
process. In this essay we will argue why it is pivotal to learn from
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books
along with the digital media.

On the one hand,
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books
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make
the base of any
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learning
since decades. Reading
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books
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make
the offspring focus their brain on one particular framework.
Furthermore
,
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a research
by Harvard says that reading
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books
is essential to train your brain to focus on things.
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People
who read more are
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expected
to focus 40% more on things than those who do not read print.

However
, new digital
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learning
has provided human with a great technique of developing
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learning
,
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but
this
also
gives options for them to look for new information every day.
Hence
, not focusing on one particular thing.

To sum up, Television has widened its spectra from
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just
entertainment to widespread
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learning
,
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but
it can never replace the focused
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learning
that can
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only
happen by concentrating on print media and with a habit of reading through
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
books
. I would suggest that digital and print media should go hand in hand to provide
overall
Holistic development of a juvenile to an intellectual and active adult.
8Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
18Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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IELTS essay Children nowadays spend a great deal of time watching television. However, television cannot replace the book as a learning tool, which is why children are less well‐educated today. v. 12

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  American English
4 paragraphs
292 words
6.0
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