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Q. Surveillance and camera in banks, offices, shops and streets has been very successful in reducing crime in workplace and public but they are also a tool for their users to spy on people’s private business What problems do surveillance cameras create? What are solutions? Nowadays, with the increase in criminal and fraudulent activities it is essential to monitor human activities. Many companies as well as public areas are safeguarded through CC TV cameras, and other latest monitoring technology devices. This may also lead to sacrificing privacy and freedom of employees and public in general. Cameras which are used to protect the belongings and keep a watch to the individual activities often creates issues. People feel they are under constant watch of the camera and they lack freedom for personal matters which may be known by the person monitoring on the cameras. As a result, employees working in company fed up and lose their motivation at work leading to its impact on their productivity. People avoid going such public places where there activities are observed as they feel un secured and their private meetings and other personal matters are being observed. One way to resolve such issue is to allow some time of closure to the camera monitoring units especially in the off work hours (i. e. Lunch time)so that individuals doesn’t feel demotivated and will have some time for personal matters. In the same way some areas of the public places should not be camera controlled so that people can enjoy and feel empowered. To conclude, Indeed surveillance and other monitoring devices are a good way for the controlling the mischievous activities of individuals but they also lead to their privacy being disturbed. This could be resolved through allowing some time off camera hours to the employees so that they can have freedom for personal matters and some places in public should be declared free camera monitoring zones to allow citizens enjoy and feel secured.
Q. Surveillance and
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in banks, offices, shops and streets has been
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very
successful in reducing crime in workplace and
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public
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but
they are
also
a tool for their users to spy on
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people’s
private business What problems do surveillance
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cameras
create? What are solutions?

Nowadays, with the increase in criminal and fraudulent
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activities
it is essential to monitor human
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activities
.
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companies
as well
as
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public
areas
are safeguarded
through CC TV
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cameras
, and other latest
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monitoring
technology devices. This may
also
lead to sacrificing privacy and freedom of employees and
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public
in general
.

Cameras which are
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used
to protect the belongings and
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keep
a
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watch
to the individual
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activities
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often
creates issues.
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People
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feel
they are under constant
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watch
of the
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camera and
they lack freedom for
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personal
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matters
which may
be known
by the person
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monitoring
on the
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cameras
.
As a result
, employees working in
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company
fed up and lose their motivation at work leading to its impact on their productivity.
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People
avoid going such
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public
places where there
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activities
are observed
as they
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feel
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un
secured and their private meetings and other
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personal
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matters
are
being observed
.

One way to resolve such issue is to
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allow
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some
time of closure to the
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camera
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monitoring
units
especially
in the off work hours (
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Lunch time
)
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so
that individuals doesn’t
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feel
demotivated and will have
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some
time for
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personal
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matters
.
In the same way
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some
areas of the
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public
places should not be
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camera
controlled
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so
that
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people
can enjoy and
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feel
empowered.

To conclude
,
Indeed
surveillance and other
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devices are a
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good
way for the controlling the mischievous
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activities
of individuals
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but
they
also
lead to their privacy
being disturbed
. This could
be resolved
through allowing
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some
time off
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camera
hours to the employees
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so
that they can have freedom for
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personal
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matters
and
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some
places in
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public
should
be declared
free
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camera
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monitoring
zones to
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allow
citizens enjoy and
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feel
secured.
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IELTS essay Children in some countries go to work and are away from schools.

Essay
  American English
5 paragraphs
326 words
5.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0
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  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
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  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 5.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.0
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