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Children from wealthy families are less prepared for life than children from poorer families. To what extent do you agree with this opinion? Use specific details and examples to explain your view.

Children from wealthy families are less prepared for life than children from poorer families. Use specific details and examples to explain your view. eKBmV
The success of a person sometimes depends on his background. Although the claims that rich children are not well-prepared for life as poor children, I believe that children who come from moneyed families are better prepared than those from families with less money. To begin with, rich children are future-oriented from infants. They are oriented to the knowledge and skills required for jobs that not only bring wealth but also enhance their talent. Instead of playing games or doing nothing like their peers, children come from families with good conditions study in international schools, attend some courses such as English, physical exercises, and financial management which are extremely necessary for their future careers. For instance, these children who study in international schools and are good students with good English often achieve more awards and have opportunities to study abroad. In addition, wealthy children have the opportunity to experience life in their free time than poor children. They are barely facing the money problems so that they can explore the world to broaden their horizons such as travel abroad or visit latest and famous places or make friends with celebrities or successful people at the seminars or events. Gradually, they become optimistic and confident about works and social relationships, which are needed for every person and job. Then fame and money come to them easily. Some might argue that unwealthy children have their experience for life more than rich children. Most of the poor children have part-time jobs to earn money to support their parents so that they can adjust, adapt and solve problems they encounter that they learn from their works. Because they have to live-saving, money should not be spent on expensive and effective courses to improve knowledge and skills. This makes them less likely to experience areas other than work. In conclusion, the children who live in moneyed families have more opportunities to experience life in many areas than other ones. However, an unwealthy childhood can make a child more independent and lead them to a successful life.
The success of a person
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depends on his background. Although the claims that rich
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children
are not well-prepared for
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life
as poor
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children
, I believe that
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children
who
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come
from moneyed
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families
are better prepared than those from
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families
with less money.

To
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begin
with, rich
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children
are future-oriented from infants. They
are oriented
to the knowledge and
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skills
required for jobs that not
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only
bring wealth
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but
also
enhance their talent.
Instead
of playing games or doing nothing like their peers,
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children
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come
from
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families
with
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good
conditions study in international schools, attend
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some
courses such as English, physical exercises, and financial management which are
extremely
necessary for their future careers.
For instance
, these
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children
who study in international schools and are
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good
students with
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good
English
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often
achieve more awards and have opportunities to study abroad.

In addition
, wealthy
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children
have the opportunity to
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experience
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life
in their free time than poor
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children
. They are
barely
facing the
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money
problems
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so
that they can explore the world to broaden their horizons such as travel abroad or visit latest and
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famous
places or
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make
friends with celebrities or successful
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people
at the seminars or
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events
.
Gradually
, they become optimistic and confident about works and social relationships, which
are needed
for every person and job. Then fame and
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money
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come
to them
easily
.

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Some
might argue that
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unwealthy
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children
have their
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experience
for
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life
more than rich
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children
. Most of the poor
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children
have part-time jobs to earn
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money
to support their parents
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so
that they can adjust, adapt and solve problems they encounter that they learn from their works.
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Because
they
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have to
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live
-saving,
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money
should not
be spent
on expensive and effective courses to
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improve
knowledge and
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skills
. This
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makes
them less likely to
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experience
areas other than work.

In conclusion
, the
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children
who
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live
in moneyed
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families
have more opportunities to
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experience
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life
in
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many
areas than other ones.
However
, an
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unwealthy
childhood can
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make
a child more independent and lead them to a successful
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life
.
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IELTS essay Children from wealthy families are less prepared for life than children from poorer families. Use specific details and examples to explain your view.

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