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Children faceing social, commercial, academic pressures causes and solutions

Children faceing social, commercial, academic pressures causes and solutions 6lA8B
Undeniably, offsprings are facing pressures not only academicly but also socially as well as professionally. Instead of letting, it speard further. Actions should be taken to solve this problem.  To initiate with the reasons which ignite this spark to make the situation worse. The top most cause is that sometime, children do not take those subjects for studying which have interest of them. They put too much pressure of this which they want not do study. If pupils face a lot of pressure then they can choose wrong direction and sometimes they can get strss. Moreover, kids suffer pressure of social like they can not full fill their dreams according their choice and they can not show their hidden talents because they have not a lot of freedom especially in the countryside. Moving further, commercial pressure because most of the parents believe that their children do work which are done by the forefather. In this way, they can not do job according their choice and taste.  As it is widely accepted that "prevention is better than cure ". Their parents should not be put pressure on their kids. Children had better do study according their interest and their parents should not interfere about their study. Furthermore, dwellers should not be guided properly by providing education related to it. In additionally, offsprings do work which they want to do then they can get success.  After pondering a great deal of thoughts. I come to conclusion that, it must be remembered that excess of everything is bad. Children can have stress and they can prey of many discuss due to pressure.
Undeniably
,
offsprings
are facing
pressures
not
only
academicly
but
also
socially
as well
as
professionally
.
Instead
of letting, it
speard
further
. Actions should
be taken
to solve this problem.  To initiate with the reasons which ignite this spark to
make
the situation worse. The top most cause is that sometime,
children
do not take those subjects for studying which have interest of them. They put too much
pressure
of this which they want not do study. If pupils face
a lot of
pressure
then they can choose
wrong
direction and
sometimes
they can
get
strss
.
Moreover
, kids suffer
pressure
of social like they can not full fill their dreams according their
choice and
they can not
show
their hidden talents
because
they have not
a lot of
freedom
especially
in the countryside. Moving
further
, commercial
pressure
because
most of the parents believe that their
children
do work which
are done
by the forefather. In this way, they can not do job according their choice and taste.  
As
it is
widely
accepted
that
"
prevention is better than cure
"
. Their parents should not
be put
pressure
on their kids.
Children
had better do study according their interest and their parents should not interfere about their study.
Furthermore
, dwellers should not
be guided
properly
by providing education related to it. In
additionally
,
offsprings
do work which they want to do then they can
get
success.  
After
pondering a great deal of thoughts. I
come
to conclusion that, it
must
be remembered
that excess of everything is
bad
.
Children
can have
stress and
they can prey of
many
discuss due to
pressure
.
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IELTS essay Children faceing social, commercial, academic pressures causes and solutions

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