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Children are studying more than playing with their friends.Why this is happening? Do you think it has positive or negative?

Children are studying more than playing with their friends. Why this is happening? Do you think it has positive or negative? kYoxe
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development of
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children
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children
nowadays are mare studying
rather
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han
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with their friends owing the tact that
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study
will give
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more their
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childen
are
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expected
by
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parents
views, I
personally
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think
that the drawbacks
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overweigh
the benefits. In this following paragraphs, the reason will
be discussed
.
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lo
commence with,
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nougdays
, the university examination are mere higher
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compatin
compared to the previous generation.
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,
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rom
this
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"
way lead to parents
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"
are more expecting in their child to have a better scores for apply in college and restrict them from doing the activities
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Hhat
they prefer and
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send_their
to tutoring. For
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psample
, in Thailand,
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numberous
of pupils
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study
in school for $ hours a day and after that
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parents
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send
their child * tutoring
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nštitute
. From father wanted
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be a doctor,
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so
I had to
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study
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extremly
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hard
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that
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ahd
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experience, my friends
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they
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, I
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children
Cannot do well
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, they
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parents
will not satisfy,
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many
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have no
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are killing
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impacts.
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see
in the report news.
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,
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always
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with the
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exams and
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to pursue
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twhat
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and find a hidden
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,
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ats
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, my friend is
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about art
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her.
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parents
is not job
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a
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low
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time
to
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improve
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skills
.
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,
however
,
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parents
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shoud
not force their
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children
to
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study
all the
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.
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should have
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to relax with their peers or to
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de
the activities that they like.
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can any,
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have their
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talents: science, supporting since this
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supportes
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that they want to do in' the
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IELTS essay Children are studying more than playing with their friends. Why this is happening? Do you think it has positive or negative?

Essay
  American English
1 paragraphs
381 words
5.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.0
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