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Childhood obesity is becoming a problem throughout the developed world. Because of this, some people think that adverts for fast food, sweets and sugary snacks should not be allowed in school and college.

Childhood obesity is becoming a problem throughout the developed world. Because of this, some people think that adverts for fast food, sweets and sugary snacks should not be allowed in school and college. mxmL

There is a famous saying " health is wealth" but now a days people have forgotten that good health is gained through regular exercises and healthy eating. Many people believe that advertisement of junk food and other unhealthy snacks should be banned in educational institutes. I agree with this point of view, but their are other ways also to tackle the overweight issues. To begin with, fast food spoils the habit of healthy eating food. Instead of eating home made food students prefer to have canned food which can also lead to various health problems like diabetes.

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health is wealthUse a smart closing quote here: "”".”
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but
Did you mean "nowadays"?nowadays
now a days
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :individualsnationsociety
people
 have forgotten that This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :beneficialproduct
good
 health is gained
 through regular exercises and healthy eating. This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:a plethora ofa number ofnumerous
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people
 believe that The usual collocation for "advertisement" is "for" not "of". Did you mean "advertisement for"?advertisement for
advertisement of
 junk You use this word too often, consider replacing it withfeedcuisinesnackmeatdrinkfoodstuff
food
 and other unhealthy snacks should be banned
 in educational institutes. I This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :acquiesce
agree
 with this point of view, This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:on the contrary
but
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their
 are other ways also
 to tackle the overweight issues. To This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :initiatecommence
begin
 with, This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:quickrapidswiftprompt
fast
You use this word too often, consider replacing it withfeedcuisinesnackmeatdrinkfoodstuff
food
 spoils the habit of healthy eating You use this word too often, consider replacing it withfeedcuisinesnackmeatdrinkfoodstuff
food
. Instead
 of eating home made You use this word too often, consider replacing it withfeedcuisinesnackmeatdrinkfoodstuff
food
 students prefer to have canned You use this word too often, consider replacing it withfeedcuisinesnackmeatdrinkfoodstuff
food
 which can also
 lead to various health problems like diabetes. 