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Change is important in our life to improve behavior

Change is important in our life to improve behavior WyEaK
Change is convert from stable statue to a new one. Some people avoid to change, therefor it is consider important. We will be display the negative and positive sides. In beginning, the most crucial merits of change which it helps numerous people to open their minds to learn new skills and they fight their fear by get out from comfort zone. For example, some individuals still work in job and tolerant a bad boss because they do not like improve their skills but when have been taken decision to change their life, they find a new job with high salary and deserve position. In addition, the demerits of change lead to sometime to collapse due to we will suffer some problems as results from this change. For instance, if a person alcoholic addicted and he want to quite; however, it is not easy because they will expose to desire come back if give up we come worst but if fight this desire you will passe out and do it In conclusion, the change is not easy but final result deserve to fight and lead to us feel meant of life by try a new things and improve our skills.
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new
one.
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people
avoid to
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change
, therefor it is
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consider
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important
. We will be display the
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negative
and
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sides.

In beginning, the most crucial merits of
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change
which it
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helps
numerous
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people
to open their minds to learn
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new
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skills and
they fight their fear by
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get
out from comfort zone.
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individuals
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work in job and tolerant a
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improve
their
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skills
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change
their
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life
, they find a
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new
job with high salary and deserve position.

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, the demerits of
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change
lead
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collapse due to we will suffer
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some
problems as results from this
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change
.
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, if a person alcoholic
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addicted and
he
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want
to quite;
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, it is not easy
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worst
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if fight this desire you will
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In conclusion
, the
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is not easy
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but
final result deserve to fight and lead to us feel meant of life by try a
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new
things and
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improve
our
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IELTS essay Change is important in our life to improve behavior

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
199 words
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4.0
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Coherence and Cohesion: 5.0
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Grammatical Range: 5.5
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