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A lot of places in the world rely on tourism as a main source of income unfortunately, tourism can also be a source of problems if it is not managed correctly

A lot of places in the world rely on tourism as a main source of income unfortunately, tourism can also be a source of problems if it is not managed correctly 15V2M
Not every criminal is the same. Every criminal is not a professional criminal or has the intention to do the wrong. At times, it is because of the situation that they have to commit a felony. As we all know that beating anybody is a misdemeanour and beating a woman is a super offence, a person was seen slapping a girl in the video. But the footage was quite long about a minute or two where the woman was seen harassing the guy, slapping him before his actions. She was drunk. So aforementioned was not his fault or intentions to slap her, but it was the situation where he was left with no option Now if that would not have been recorded and the women would have filed a case, the guy has the chances of being declared as the criminal. Not every criminal is a criminal. I mean that the person has not even committed the crime, but because of some false pieces of evidence. Since he is not at fault, so keeping him in prison will pollute his mind as he is surrounded by some actual criminals who are always up intending to commit the violation. He may become a criminal because of the wrong decision taken for him to keep him in prison. Keeping them in prisons makes them socially unfit and they find hard to fit into society. Their personal development is hindered. They are not aware of the current affairs. In other word, keeping them in prison increases their chance of becoming real criminals
Not every
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criminal
is the same. Every
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criminal
is not a professional
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criminal
or has the intention to do
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the


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wrong
. At times, it
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is


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because


of the situation that they

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have to


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commit
a felony.
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we all know that beating anybody is
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a


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misdemeanour


and beating a woman is a super

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offence
, a person was

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seen


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slapping
a girl in the video.

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the footage was quite long about a minute or two where the woman was

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seen


harassing the guy, slapping him

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his
actions. She

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was
drunk.

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aforementioned was not his fault or intentions to slap her,

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it was the situation where he was

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left


with no option

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if that would not have

been recorded


and the women would have filed a case, the guy has the chances of

being declared


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as
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. Not every
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criminal
is a
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criminal
. I mean that the person has not even committed the crime,

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of

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false
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keeping him in prison will pollute his mind as he

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some


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actual
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criminals
who are always up intending to commit the violation. He may become a
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criminal


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because


of the

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wrong


decision taken for him to

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keep


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him
in prison. Keeping them in
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prisons


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makes


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them


socially


unfit and

they find

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hard


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to
fit into society. Their personal
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development


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is
hindered. They are not aware of
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the


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current


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affairs
. In other word, keeping them in prison increases their chance of becoming real
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criminals

IELTS essay A lot of places in the world rely on tourism as a main source of income unfortunately, tourism can also be a source of problems if it is not managed correctly

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  American English
57 paragraphs
258 words
5.0
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Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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