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CFC emissions which are released into the atmosphere

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The line paragraph describe the picture of CFC emissions which are released into the atmosphere in four countries during the twelve-years period. There were a significant changes between Poland and Ukraine. Both of these countries had the highest amount of CFC emissions with 5000 metric tons and around 4700 metric tons in 1989. Poland on the contrary maintain to go down steadily. Meanwhile, Ukraine drops drastically berween 1989 and 1995, it later rise slowly in 1995 up to 2001. On the other hand, Malaysia and Egypt are in different level than both Poland and Ukraine in 1989. Malaysia remain stable throughout the year until iags with a great quontty of emissions incuding obout 3300 metric tons, Surprisingly it started to fall in the next couple of years and drop to 2000 metric tons. However egypt falls persistenly and meet Ukraine in the year of 2001 with about 1200 metric tons. In conciusion, although Poland carry the first lead of CFC emission in 1989, certainly it had became the lowest total of emissions overall than the other three countries in 2001.
The line paragraph
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describe
the picture of CFC
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emissions
which
are released


into the atmosphere in four countries during the twelve-years period.

There were a significant
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changes
between Poland and Ukraine. Both of

these countries had the highest amount of CFC
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emissions
with 5000 metric

tons and around 4700 metric tons in 1989. Poland
on the contrary
maintain

to go down
steadily
. Meanwhile, Ukraine drops
drastically
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berween
1989 and

1995, it later
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rise
slowly
in 1995 up to 2001.

On the other hand
, Malaysia and Egypt are in
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different
level than both

Poland and Ukraine in 1989. Malaysia remain stable throughout the year

until
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iags
with a great
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quontty
of
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emissions
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incuding
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obout
3300 metric tons,

Surprisingly
it
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started
to fall in the
next
couple of years and drop to 2000 metric

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tons
.
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However
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egypt
falls
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persistenly
and
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meet
Ukraine in the year of 2001 with about 1200 metric tons.

In
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conciusion
, although Poland carry the
first
lead of CFC
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emission
in 1989,

certainly
it had
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became
the lowest total of
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emissions
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overall
than the other

three countries in 2001.
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IELTS essay CFC emissions which are released into the atmosphere

Essay
  American English
7 paragraphs
180 words
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