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All towns and cities should have outdoor public spaces such as squares and parks. Agree or disagree

All towns and cities should have outdoor public spaces such as squares and parks. Agree or disagree 0aBNq
In this day and age, it is clear that nations all over the world are becoming modernized. In which, many people think that governments and council cities should establish more and more outdoor public spaces for citizens. In the following paragraphs, I completely agree with this idea. To begin with, there are a number of reasons why I think it is a positive trend. The first reason related to this is that the governments are dutiful to present the mainstream citizens common interest and welfare. That is because a majority of local people need to pay taxes, thus governments need to take responsibility to improve local people’s living quality. For example, it is undeniable that local people have the right to require having public spaces in their areas. The second reason is that outdoor spaces lend people a hand in staying healthy and reducing stressness when they live in dense cities. That is because large cities are facing a lack of accommodation, thus most people live in departments or small houses and sometimes they can feel uncomfortable. For example, parks are places which can help people to have more spaces to enjoy fresh air. Besides, outdoor spaces provide spaces for people practising exercises or walking to keep fit and stay healthy. In conclusion, it is undoubted that construction of outdoor spaces such as squares and parks is really necessary in our lives. In my opinion, I believe that this trend adapts citizen’s requirements and gives a number of benefits for their lives.
In this day and age, it is
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clear
that nations all over the world are becoming modernized. In which,
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many
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people
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think
that
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governments
and council cities should establish more and more
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outdoor
public
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spaces
for citizens.
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the following paragraphs, I completely
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with, there are a number of reasons why I
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it is a
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trend. The
first
reason related to this is that the
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governments
are dutiful to present the mainstream citizens common interest and welfare.
That is
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because
a majority of local
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people
need to pay taxes,
thus
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governments
need to take responsibility to
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improve
local
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people’s
living quality.
For example
, it is undeniable that local
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people
have the right to require having public
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spaces
in their areas.

The second reason is that
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outdoor
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spaces
lend
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people
a hand in staying healthy and reducing
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stressness
when they
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in dense cities.
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because
large cities are facing a lack of accommodation,
thus
most
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people
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live
in departments or
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small
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houses
and
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sometimes
they can feel uncomfortable.
For example
, parks are places which can
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help
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people
to have more
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to enjoy fresh air.
Besides
,
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outdoor
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spaces
provide
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for
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people
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practising
exercises or walking to
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keep
fit and stay healthy.

In conclusion
, it
is undoubted
that construction of
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outdoor
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spaces
such as squares and parks is
really
necessary in our
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lives
. In my opinion, I believe that this trend adapts citizen’s requirements and gives a number of benefits for their
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.

IELTS essay All towns and cities should have outdoor public spaces such as squares and parks. Agree or disagree

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
252 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
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Grammatical Range: 6.5
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