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First of it, Causing negative effects and bad example on young people. The message to young people is that success is can be achieved easily is an obvious evidence. Some people think that the more scandals celebrities get, the more famous they are. Consequently, if one wants to be famous, one must know how to get glamour and wealth. No matter how illegal one is trying to. Can you imagine when it becomes a theory that so hard does one work that one gets nothing at all. There, school works is not necessary. Paris Hilton known by scandals. She spends the most of times attending parties and nightclubs instead of training to become good character. She is a good example for who achieved fame by wrong reasons. Moreover, they are bad role models that young people trend to follow. Not only have celebrities used their glamour and wealthy to be known, but also they have used such as: alcohol, marihuana, sexual harassments, outrageous words, …. .
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example on young
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. The message to young
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that success is can
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that the more scandals celebrities
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, the more
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they are.
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, if one wants to be
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, one
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know how to
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glamour and wealth. No matter how illegal one is trying to. Can you imagine when it becomes a theory that
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so
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does one work that one
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gets
nothing at all. There, school works is not necessary. Paris Hilton known by scandals. She spends the
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most of times
attending parties and nightclubs
instead
of training to become
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good
character. She is a
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good
example for who achieved fame by
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wrong
reasons.
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, they are
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bad
role models that young
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trend to follow. Not
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have celebrities
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their glamour and wealthy to
be known
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used
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marihuana
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harassments
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IELTS essay celebrities are famous for scandal

Essay
  American English
1 paragraphs
166 words
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4.0
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Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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