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car ownership has increased so rapidly over the past thirty years that many cities in the world are now one big traffic jam.

People that purchased cars have been rockets over the years, in addition to that, lots of people have to experiences congestion especially the one that lives in city. Even though the government had provide their needs of transportation with another platform, people still choose to go with their vehicles. This condition have been a problems to almost every countries around the world, instead of using the public transport the people is more rely with their own cars or motorcycle. The government has work very hard trying to solve this problems, for instance upgrade the interior of the public buses, expands railway, and develop new stations regularly for another area. However, this solution still not enough to solve this problem, people still concern to use the public transports and rather to go with their own transport. In addition to that, some countries have already solve this problems, not only with advanced their trains or buses, moreover they try to win people trust by their safety and diligent with high standart. For example, in japan if a train late for only a couple minutes from the schedule, the conductor will inform and bow in front of the passengers as an act of apologies. Nevertheless, this seems a little extreme but this behavior has becomes their standart in public transports programs, along with this formula they can trusted by their people. In conclusion to that, the government should increase their sensitivity to provide the people with trust and safety guarantee, besides to increases more advanced technology in their public transports. However, the people also have to open their trust for the government eager to make this solution works.
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that
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purchased
cars have been rockets over the years,
in addition
to that, lots of
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people
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have to
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experiences
congestion
especially
the one that
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lives
in city.
Even though
the
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government
had
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provide
their needs of transportation with another platform,
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people
still
choose to
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go with
their vehicles.

This condition have been a
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problems
to almost every
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countries
around the world,
instead
of using the
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public
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transport
the
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people
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is
more
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rely
with their
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own
cars or motorcycle. The
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government
has work
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very
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hard
trying to solve
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this
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problems
,
for instance
upgrade the interior of the
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public
buses, expands railway, and develop new stations
regularly
for another area.
However
, this solution
still
not
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enough
to solve this
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problem
,
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people
still
concern to
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use
the
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public
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transports
and
rather
to
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go with
their
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own
transport.

In addition
to that,
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some
countries have already
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solve
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this
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problems
, not
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only
with advanced their trains or buses,
moreover
they try to win
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people
trust by their safety and diligent with high
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standart
.
For example
, in
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japan
if a train late for
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only
a
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couple
minutes from the schedule, the conductor will inform and bow in front of the passengers as an act of apologies.
Nevertheless
, this seems a
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little
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extreme
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but
this behavior has becomes their
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standart
in
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public
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transports
programs, along with this formula they can
The modal verb ‘can’ requires the verb’s base form.
trusted
by their
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people
.

In conclusion
to that, the
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government
should increase their sensitivity to provide the
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people
with trust and safety guarantee,
besides
to increases more advanced technology in their
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public
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transports
.
However
, the
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people
also
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have to
open their trust for the
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government
eager to
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make
this solution works.
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IELTS essay car ownership has increased so rapidly over the past thirty years that many cities in the world are now one big traffic jam.

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
275 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
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Lexical Resource: 5.0
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  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.0
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