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today, the high sales of popular consumer goods reflect the power of advertising and not the real needs of society in which they are sold. to what extent do you agree or disagree?

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A number of people believe that the best-seller products are considerably prevalent chiefly on the grounds that commercial and advertisement has a direct impact on the impulsive purchase rather than the main requirement of people. I agree totally with this statement and my reasons are as follows. These days, advertising as a strong and wealth industry plays an important economic role in our society, but despite the great value and probable benefits of that, companies abuse it to soar the turnover of their products. Firstly, the Media and especially TV is completely dominated by advertisers, and people particularly youngsters who are very receptive to new branded goods, are absolutely susceptible to imitate the role models on the TV. Unfortunately, role models tempt children to make an impulsive purchase. Secondly, Advertisers try to stress the attribute of products valued by the nation and simultaneously to play down the drawbacks of consumer goods and as a result, low-quality products are sold at high costs and prices. Finally, it is very essential to take into consideration the function and practical values of products without paying attention to promotions. For instance, fast food which its disadvantages are known now is dramatically advertised by actors and other role models. On the other side, people have to afford their real needs, so government and scientists are really liable for the real needs of society, thereby combating harmful advertisements. In addition, it is important to prepare all the goods with real quality and without keeping up with others. In my opinion, we are all responsible for the effects of advertisement, and I once reaffirm my position that Todays, advertising is creating a fake requirement. By way of conclusion, it is interesting to note that the influence of advertisement on high sales products is greatly high instead of real needs and I still agree with this idea.
A number of
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people
believe that the best-seller
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products
are
considerably
prevalent
chiefly
on the grounds that commercial and
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advertisement
has a direct impact on the impulsive
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purchase
rather
than the main requirement of
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people
. I
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agree
totally
with this statement and my reasons are as follows.

These days, advertising as a strong and wealth industry plays an
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important
economic
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role
in our society,
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but
despite the great value and probable benefits of that,
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companies
abuse it to soar the turnover of their
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products
.
Firstly
, the Media and
especially
TV is completely dominated by advertisers, and
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people
particularly
youngsters who are
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very
receptive to new branded
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goods
, are
absolutely
susceptible to imitate the
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role
models on the TV. Unfortunately,
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role
models tempt children to
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make
an impulsive
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purchase
.
Secondly
, Advertisers try to
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stress
the attribute of
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products
valued by the nation and
simultaneously
to play down the drawbacks of consumer
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goods
and
as a result
, low-quality
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products
are sold
at high costs and prices.
Finally
, it is
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very
essential to take into consideration the function and practical values of
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products
without paying attention to promotions.
For instance
,
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fast
food which its disadvantages
are known
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now
is
dramatically
advertised by actors and other
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role
models.

On the other side,
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people
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have to
afford their
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real
needs,
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so
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government
and scientists are
really
liable for the
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real
needs of society, thereby combating harmful
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advertisements
.
In addition
, it is
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important
to prepare all the
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
goods
with
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real
quality and without keeping up with others. In my opinion, we are all responsible for the effects of
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advertisement
, and I once reaffirm my position that
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Todays
, advertising is creating a fake requirement.

By way of conclusion, it is interesting to note that the influence of
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advertisement
on high sales
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products
is
greatly
high
instead
of
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real
needs and I
still
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agree
with this
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idea
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IELTS essay today, the high sales of popular consumer goods reflect the power of advertising and not the real needs of society in which they are sold.

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
309 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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Grammatical Range: 6.5
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