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Car ownership has increased so rapidly over the past thirty years that many cities in the world are now ‘one big traffic jam’ How true do you think this statement is? What measures can governments take to discourage people from using their cars? v.8

Car ownership has increased so rapidly over the past thirty years that many cities in the world are now ‘one big traffic jam’ How true do you think this statement is? What measures can governments take to discourage people from using their cars? v. 8
Nowadays, the number of vehicles has risen sharply and it was considered to be the main cause of the traffic problems in many cities. This essay will present my view about this issue and propose two measures as a remedy to it. In the past, it was difficult for some people buying cars because of their expensive prices. However, when technology was developed, the cost of car manufacturing was decreased making it reachable for everyone. Therefore, consumers have the power to buy vehicles and then it led to a traffic jam we face today. I personally think it is true that an increase in vehicle ownership can lead to a traffic problem. In order to solve this problem, there are two solutions that governments can use to influence people not to use their private cars. First, governments should encourage people to use public transportations. In fact, many countries have already encouraged their people to use public services instead of their own vehicles but the problem still not be solved because people did not realize how effective using public transport can be. Thus, governments should develop public transportation in many ways; for example, every commuters’ cleanliness should be at an excellent level, buses should be on time and have their own lane during peak hours and estimate travel time should be provided to people. The other measure which is considered as an indirect solution to reduce using private vehicles is that governments increase some costs that paid by car owners and at the same time make public transport prices be reasonable. Increasing costs of using private vehicles such as fuel tax, maintenance, or tollway tickets can encourage people to look for cheaper kinds of commuters to take them to their destinations. In addition, if governments reduce public transportation prices, they can get more attention from people and that might solve the traffic problem. In conclusion, I strongly agree that the increase in car owners created a traffic jam in many countries. The two solutions that governments can use to convince people from using their own vehicles and avoid traffic jams are the effective development of the public transportation system and the increasing costs of using cars together with reducing public transportation prices.
Nowadays, the number of
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vehicles
has risen
sharply
and it
was considered
to be the main cause of the
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traffic
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problems
in
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many
cities. This essay will present my view about this issue and propose two measures as a remedy to it.

In the past, it was difficult for
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some
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people
buying
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cars
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because
of their expensive
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prices
.
However
, when technology
was developed
, the
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cost
of
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car
manufacturing
was decreased
making it reachable for everyone.
Therefore
, consumers have the power to
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buy
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vehicles
and then it led to a
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traffic
jam we face
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today
. I
personally
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think
it is true that an increase in
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vehicle
ownership can lead to a
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traffic
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problem
. In order to solve this
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problem
, there are two solutions that
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governments
can
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use
to influence
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people
not to
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use
their private cars.

First
,
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governments
should encourage
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people
to
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use
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public
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transportations
. In fact,
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many
countries have already encouraged their
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people
to
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use
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public
services
instead
of their
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own
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vehicles
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but
the
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problem
still
not
be solved
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because
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people
did not realize how effective using
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public
transport can be.
Thus
,
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governments
should develop
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public
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transportation
in
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many
ways;
for example
, every commuters’ cleanliness should be at an excellent level, buses should be on time and have their
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own
lane during peak hours and estimate travel time should
be provided
to
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people
.

The other measure which
is considered
as an indirect solution to
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reduce
using private
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vehicles
is that
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governments
increase
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some
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costs
that paid by
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car
owners and at the same time
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make
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public
transport
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prices
be reasonable. Increasing
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costs
of using private
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vehicles
such as fuel tax, maintenance, or tollway tickets can encourage
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people
to look for cheaper kinds of commuters to take them to their destinations.
In addition
, if
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governments
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reduce
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public
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transportation
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prices
, they can
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get
more attention from
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people
and that might solve the
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traffic
problem.

In conclusion
, I
strongly
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agree
that the increase in
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car
owners created a
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traffic
jam in
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many
countries. The two solutions that
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governments
can
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use
to convince
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people
from using their
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own
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vehicles
and avoid
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traffic
jams are the effective development of the
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public
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transportation
system and the increasing
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costs
of using
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cars
together with reducing
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public
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transportation
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prices
.
10Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
57Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
0Mistakes

IELTS essay Car ownership has increased so rapidly over the past thirty years that many cities in the world are now ‘one big traffic jam’ How true do you think this statement is? What measures can governments take to discourage people from using their cars? v. 8

Essay
  American English
5 paragraphs
371 words
6.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
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  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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