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Car ownership has increased so rapidly over the past thirty years that many cities in the world are now 'one big traffic jam'. How true do you think this statement is? What measures can governments take to discourage people from using their cars? ? v.26

Car ownership has increased so rapidly over the past thirty years that many cities in the world are now 'one big traffic jam'. How true do you think this statement is? What measures can governments take to discourage people from using their cars? ? v. 26
Thanks to advancements in technology, leading to reduction in the cost of vehicles, many people in our societies now own cars. This phenomenon that started three decades ago, has seen our roads flooded with cars, and the consequence is an ever increasing traffic jam. To solve this problem, our government can take a number of approaches to dissuade the use of personal motors. One way to discourage the use of personal automobiles is to encourage the use of public transportation. Government can achieve this by reducing the cost of the tickets and by creation of more bus stops. Our public transport systems today, are very expensive to commute with. It is far cheaper for one to go to work with his own car than take the available public buses. Also, commuters will be happy to see that the public buses will stop them very close to their destinations. The bus stops we have currently are not properly planned. For example, the nearest bus stop to my office is about one kilometer away. It implies that if I have to use public transport to go to work, I will have to trek a long distance from the bus stop to my office. However, if more parks are built and these gaps are closed up to within one hundred meters, many people will be encouraged to join the mass transit buses. Another way to discourage the use of personal cars is by imposing some taxes on vehicles that are on the roads. In Lagos State for example, what the state did was to build toll gates and to pass through it, each vehicle is required to pay a certain amount. They also introduced car-use levies that each motor is expected to pay on monthly basis, as long as they want to run on the roads for that month. These fees made the use of individual cars very expensive and people avoided them. As a result, our roads became free from long stationary queues of vehicles. In conclusion, it will be nice to see the problems traffic jams on our roads solved. Our leaders can achieve this by making public transportation appealing to the masses and by imposing some levies on the use of personal cars.
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in our societies
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. This phenomenon that
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started
three decades ago, has
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our
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roads
flooded with
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cars
, and the consequence is an
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ever increasing
traffic jam. To solve this problem, our
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government
can take a number of approaches to dissuade the
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use
of
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personal
motors.

One way to discourage the
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use
of
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personal
automobiles is to encourage the
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use
of
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public
transportation.
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Government
can achieve this by reducing the cost of the tickets and by creation of more bus
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stops
. Our
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public
transport systems
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today
, are
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very
expensive to commute with. It is far cheaper for one to go to work with his
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own
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car
than take the available
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public
buses.
Also
, commuters will be happy to
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see
that the
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public
buses will
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stop
them
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very
close to their destinations. The bus
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stops
we have
currently
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are
not
properly
planned.
For example
, the nearest bus
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stop
to my office is about one kilometer away. It implies that if I
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have to
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use
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public
transport to go to work, I will
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have to
trek a long distance from the bus
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stop
to my office.
However
, if more parks
are built
and these gaps
are closed
up to within one hundred meters,
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many
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people
will
be encouraged
to
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join
the mass transit buses.

Another way to discourage the
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use
of
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personal
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cars
is by imposing
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some
taxes on vehicles that are on the
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roads
. In Lagos State
for example
, what the state did
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was
to build
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toll gates
and to pass through it, each vehicle
is required
to pay a certain amount. They
also
introduced car-
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use
levies that each motor is
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expected
to pay on monthly basis, as long as they want to run on the
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roads
for that month. These fees made the
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use
of individual
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cars
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very
expensive and
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people
avoided them.
As a result
, our
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roads
became free from long stationary queues of vehicles.

In conclusion
, it will be nice to
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see
the problems traffic jams on our
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roads
solved. Our leaders can achieve this by making
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public
transportation appealing to the masses and by imposing
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some
levies on the
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
use
of
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
personal
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
cars
.
8Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
26Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
4Mistakes

IELTS essay Car ownership has increased so rapidly over the past thirty years that many cities in the world are now 'one big traffic jam'. How true do you think this statement is? What measures can governments take to discourage people from using their cars? ? v. 26

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
373 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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  • Include an introduction and conclusion
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  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
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  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
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  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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