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Car ownership has increased so rapidly over the past thirty years that many cities in the world are now 'one big traffic jam'. How true do you think this statement is? What measures can governments take to discourage people from using their cars? v.25

Car ownership has increased so rapidly over the past thirty years that many cities in the world are now 'one big traffic jam'. How true do you think this statement is? What measures can governments take to discourage people from using their cars? v. 25
There has been a surge in the purchase of personal vehicles in the past three decades. This phenomenon is caused by a reduction in the price of cars, and the consequence is that we are now faced with traffic jams on the roads of our major cities everyday. To solve this problem, government should dissuade people from using their cars and a number of measures can be used to achieve this purpose. One way to discourage people from the use personal motors is to increase the number of buses in the public transportation network. The number of vehicles in use today are not enough, which is why so many passengers are stranded on their way to work. Forcing people to stop using their cars without addressing this problem will mean more chaos. However, government can assure the public that they won' t be stranded if they decide to use public transport by providing extra buses to cater for all commuters. Even with more buses, most people will shun public transports due to it high cost. Currently, it is cheaper to go to work with personal cars and most people question why they need to join the public buses with the current price of tickets. However, if the ticket prices are reduced considerably, those who use their cars will see reasons to park them and join public transport. Another way to demoralize people from the use of their cars is by making it very expensive to run personal cars. In Lagos state for example, this was achieved through the introduction of toll gates and fees. Every automobile on the road was meant to pay a certain amount before they are allowed through the gates. Most individuals found it very expensive and stopped using their cars. In conclusion, for every, filled bus, we have taken away twenty to thirty personal cars away from our roads. There is no doubt that as more and more people are encouraged to use the public transport, our roads will become freer from long queues of stationary vehicles.
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personal
vehicles in the past three decades. This phenomenon
is caused
by a reduction in the price of
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cars
, and the consequence is that we are
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now
faced with traffic jams on the
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roads
of our major cities
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everyday
. To solve this problem,
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government
should dissuade
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people
from using their
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cars
and a number of measures can be
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used
to achieve this purpose.

One way to discourage
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people
from the
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use
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personal
motors is to increase the number of buses in the
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public
transportation network. The number of vehicles in
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use
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today
are not
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enough
, which is why
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so
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many
passengers
are stranded
on their way to work. Forcing
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people
to
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stop
using their
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cars
without addressing this problem will mean more chaos.
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,
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government
can assure the
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that they
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be stranded
if they decide to
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transport by providing extra buses to cater for all commuters.

Even with more buses, most
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people
will shun
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public
transports due to it high cost.
Currently
, it is cheaper to go to work with
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personal
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cars
and most
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people
question why they need to
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join
the
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public
buses with the
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current
price of tickets.
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, if the ticket prices are
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reduced
considerably
, those who
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use
their
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cars
will
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see
reasons to park them and
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join
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public
transport.

Another way to demoralize
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people
from the
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use
of their
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cars
is by making it
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very
expensive to run
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personal
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cars
. In Lagos state
for example
, this
was achieved
through the introduction of
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toll gates
and fees. Every automobile on the
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road
was meant
to pay a certain amount
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before
they are
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allowed
through the gates. Most individuals found it
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very
expensive and
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stopped
using their cars.

In conclusion
, for every, filled bus, we have taken away twenty to thirty
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personal
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cars
away from our
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roads
. There is no doubt that as more and more
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people
are encouraged
to
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use
the
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public
transport, our
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roads
will become freer from long queues of stationary vehicles.
5Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
31Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
3Mistakes

IELTS essay Car ownership has increased so rapidly over the past thirty years that many cities in the world are now 'one big traffic jam'. How true do you think this statement is? What measures can governments take to discourage people from using their cars? v. 25

Essay
  American English
5 paragraphs
341 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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