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Car ownership has increased so rapidly over the past thirty years that many cities in the world are now ‘one big traffic jam’. How true do you think this statement is? What measures can governments take to discourage people from using their cars? v.23

Car ownership has increased so rapidly over the past thirty years that many cities in the world are now ‘one big traffic jam’. How true do you think this statement is? What measures can governments take to discourage people from using their cars? v. 23
Nowadays, the desire for car usage has increased significantly from thirty years ago and that has impacted traffic in many cities. I totally agree with this opinion. I will discuss the causes and render the solutions which governments can take to solve this problem. Transportation congestion may come from a variety of reasons, but the main reason is ride usage increase. At present, there are many factors that make people own cars. For example, a marketing competition between automobile dealers, which doesn't cause a monopoly market so that makes most car prices are affordable. Also, banks release loans more easily and define a lower down payment. Furthermore, the disadvantages of using public transportation outweigh the advantages such as sanitation, punctuality and prices. As a result, people have more opportunities to afford a car. Due to traffic jams, the government has issued measures to tackle the problem. However, these measures don't fix the problem at the point. For instance, a road expansion and creating more roads. The measures should focus on the number of cars on the road. For example, specifying the days for car usage, improving public transportation and increasing the parking prices and gas prices. In conclusion, in my opinion, people can afford to buy a wagon more easily than the past. Therefore, the amount of car increase in roads causes transportation congestion. The government should be concerned about the measure of efficacy and emphasize on decreasing the number of cars. In the future, traffic jams will be reduced.
Nowadays, the desire for
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car
usage has increased
significantly
from thirty years ago and that has impacted traffic in
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many
cities. I
totally
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agree
with this opinion. I will discuss the causes and render the solutions which
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governments
can take to solve this problem.

Transportation congestion may
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come
from a variety of reasons,
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but
the main reason is ride usage increase. At present, there are
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many
factors that
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make
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people
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own
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cars
.
For example
, a marketing competition between automobile dealers, which doesn't cause a monopoly market
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so
that
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makes
most
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car
prices are affordable.
Also
, banks release loans more
easily
and define a lower down payment.
Furthermore
, the disadvantages of using public transportation outweigh the advantages such as sanitation, punctuality and prices.
As a result
,
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people
have more opportunities to afford a car.

Due to traffic jams, the
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government
has issued
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measures
to tackle the problem.
However
, these
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measures
don't
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fix
the problem at the point.
For instance
, a
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road
expansion and creating more
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roads
. The
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measures
should focus on the number of
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cars
on the
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road
.
For example
, specifying the days for
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car
usage, improving public transportation and increasing the parking prices and gas prices.

In conclusion
, in my opinion,
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people
can afford to
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buy
a wagon more
easily
than the past.
Therefore
, the amount of
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car
increase in
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roads
causes transportation congestion. The
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government
should
be concerned
about the
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measure
of efficacy and emphasize on decreasing the number of
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
cars
. In the future, traffic jams will be
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
reduced
.
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IELTS essay Car ownership has increased so rapidly over the past thirty years that many cities in the world are now ‘one big traffic jam’. How true do you think this statement is? What measures can governments take to discourage people from using their cars? v. 23

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
250 words
8
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 8.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 8.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 8.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 8.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
  • ?
    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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