Do you want to improve your writing? Try our new evaluation service and get detailed feedback.
Check Your Text it's free

Capital punishment is good for countries. To what extent do you agree or disagree? v.1

Capital punishment is good for countries. v. 1
It is argued by some that the death penalty benefits a nation. I completely agree with this opinion and in this essay I will state the reasons for my view. The most compelling reason for holding to my view is that the death penalty would effectively deter people from committing serious crimes. This is because it instils fear of carrying out such crimes as people would not want to lose their life as a result of that. Such a policy would thus stop citizens from committing offences and this would help in reducing crime rate. Another reason for my position is that the death sentence would reduce the cost of imprisonment substantially as the government will be able to spend less money on keeping the criminal in prison. If the criminal is jailed for many years or for life, the government would need to pay for the enormous expenses involved such as the cost of food for the prisoners and the salaries for the prison officers. However, with the death sentence, the prisoner will spend less time in prison and the cost would decrease significantly. Lastly, capital punishment would ensure that dangerous criminals do not commit the same crime again. Indeed, if criminals only go to prison, they could repeat the same crime when they are released. On the other hand, if they are executed, they will not pose a threat to society ever again. In conclusion, I totally agree with the opinion that sentencing serious criminals to death is beneficial for countries. This is because of its deterrent effect, its ability to save the government a lot of money and the fact that we can keep dangerous criminals out of society forever.
It
is argued
by
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
some
that the death penalty benefits a nation. I completely
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
agree
with this opinion and in this essay I will state the reasons for my view.

The most compelling reason for holding to my view is that the death penalty would
effectively
deter
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
people
from committing serious
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
crimes
. This is
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
because
it
Possible spelling mistake. 'instils' is British English.
instils
fear of carrying out such
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
crimes
as
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
people
would not want to lose their
Did you mean "lives"?
life
as a result
of that. Such a policy would
thus
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
stop
citizens from committing
Possible spelling mistake. 'offences' is British English.
offences
and this would
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
help
in reducing
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
crime
rate.

Another reason for my position is that the death sentence would
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
reduce
the cost of imprisonment
substantially
as the
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
government
will be able to spend less money on keeping the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
criminal
in
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
prison
. If the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
criminal
is jailed
for
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
many
years or for life, the
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
government
would need to pay for the enormous expenses involved such as the cost of food for the prisoners and the salaries for the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
prison
officers.
However
, with the death sentence, the prisoner will spend less time in
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
prison
and the cost would decrease
significantly
.

Lastly
, capital punishment would ensure that
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
dangerous
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
criminals
do not commit the same
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
crime
again.
Indeed
, if
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
criminals
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
only
go to
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
prison
, they could repeat the same
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
crime
when they
are released
.
On the other hand
, if they
are executed
, they will not pose a threat to society ever again.

In conclusion
, I
totally
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
agree
with the opinion that sentencing serious
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
criminals
to death is beneficial for countries. This is
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
because
of its deterrent effect, its ability to save the
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
government
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
a lot of
money and the fact that we can
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
keep
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
dangerous
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
criminals
out of society forever.
8Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
15Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
3Mistakes
Learning another language is not only learning different words for the same things, but learning another way to think about things.
Flora Lewis

IELTS essay Capital punishment is good for countries. v. 1

Essay
  American English
5 paragraphs
283 words
6.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
  • ?
    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
  • ?
    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
Labels Descriptions
  • ?
    Currently is not available
  • Meet the criteria
  • Doesn't meet the criteria
Similar posts


Recent posts