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Candian donators by age groups in 2000 and 2015

Candian donators by age groups in 2000 and 2015 EdWVR
During 2000 and 2015 there were a certain amount of Canadian donators. To summarize the information, the donators are divided in different age ranges. In 18 to 24 years of age range, from 2000 to 2015 there is a decrease of 10% of the donators. Likewise, comparing the 25 to 34 range, there was a decrease of the 3 percent of the donators in 2000 and 2015. As well, in the range of 35 to 49, there was 5 percent less of the donators. However, in the range of 50 to 64 the amount of donators increase 4 percent. Finally, in the last range of age which is 65 and over, there was an increase of the 3 percent comparing the years 2000 and 2015. To conclude, the range with a major decrease was the 18 to 24 with a 10 percent. On the other hand, the group of age with a major increase was the group from 50 to 64 with a 4 porcent more of donators.
During 2000 and 2015 there were a certain amount of Canadian
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are divided
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. In 18 to 24 years of
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, from 2000 to 2015 there is a decrease of 10% of the
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donators
.
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, comparing the 25 to 34
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, there was a decrease of the 3
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of the
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in 2000 and 2015.
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of 35 to 49, there was 5
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less of the
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.
However
, in the
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of 50 to 64 the amount of
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4
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Finally
, in the last
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of
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which is 65 and over, there was an increase of the 3
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comparing the years 2000 and 2015.
To conclude
, the
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with a major decrease was the 18 to 24 with a 10
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On the other hand
, the group of
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with a major increase was the group from 50 to 64 with a 4
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IELTS essay Candian donators by age groups in 2000 and 2015

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