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By punishing murderers with the death penalty, society is also guilt of committing murder. Therefore, life in prison is a better punishment for murderers. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement? v.1

By punishing murderers with the death penalty, society is also guilt of committing murder. Therefore, life in prison is a better punishment for murderers. with this statement? v. 1
Nowadays, many experts and global organizations are finding a united definition of a country’s success. It is believed that economic development as GDP growth will illustrate the achievement of a nation. Meanwhile, some people put forward the idea that besides this factor, the existence other features that have a stronger impact on that. As far as I am concerned that the latter opinion should receive more support. First, it is obvious that for most countries, the political institution plays a critical role in creating a country’s all-round development. This is because it might be an important guideline promoting the progress of others important areas such as education, economics, society, science and technology. If a country exists in an undemocratic mode, it might be able to lead to the corruption problem, social inequality, and even occurring advocacy group phenomenon in the political environment and that means the country do not keep pace with the fast-paced development of globalization and therefore inhibits the country’s economic and social growth. This is particularly important in poor countries like Haiti, South Korea, Congo and so forth. That is not to say that economic progress is not an assessment of a nation’s success. It is due to the fact that economic factor exerts a significant impact on mirroring the successful level of countries in the world. For instance, today’s economists and governments still use GDP, GNP and CPI index in order to estimate countries’ development. However, once a nation gives priority to accelerate the economics, this may lead to increasing the gap between the poor and the rich, high inflation, economic-based crimes, and unstable society. Thus, governments should choose a stable growth corresponded with prosperous society and economy. In summary, the country should create the sustainable and successful progress in many areas based on the collaborative and democratic institution and thus by making the society more prosperity and happiness. Meanwhile, we should not neglect to invest effectively in economic development
Nowadays,
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many
experts and global organizations are finding a united definition of a
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country’s
success. It
is believed
that
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economic
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development
as GDP growth will illustrate the achievement of a nation. Meanwhile,
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some
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people
put forward the
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idea
that
besides
this factor, the existence other features that have a stronger impact on that.
“As” at the beginning of a sentence usually requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
As
far as I
am concerned
that the latter opinion should receive more support.

First
, it is obvious that for most
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countries
, the political institution plays a critical role in creating a
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country’s
all-round
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development
. This is
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because
it might be an
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important
guideline promoting the progress of others
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important
areas such as education,
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economics
,
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society
, science and technology. If a
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country
exists
Consider replacing "in an undemocratic mode" with the adverb for "undemocratic"; e.g., "in a hasty manner" with "hastily".
in an undemocratic mode
, it might be able to lead to the corruption problem, social inequality, and even occurring advocacy group phenomenon in the political environment and that means the
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country
do not
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keep
pace with the
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fast
-paced
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development
of globalization and
therefore
inhibits the
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country’s
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economic
and social growth. This is
particularly
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important
in poor
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countries
like Haiti, South Korea, Congo and
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so
forth.

That is
not to say that
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economic
progress is not an assessment of a nation’s success. It is due to the fact that
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economic
factor exerts a significant impact on mirroring the successful level of
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countries
in the world.
For instance
,
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today
’s economists and
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governments
still
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use
GDP, GNP and CPI index in order to estimate
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countries’
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development
.
However
, once a nation gives priority to accelerate the
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economics
, this may lead to increasing the gap between the poor and the rich, high inflation, economic-based crimes, and unstable
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society
.
Thus
,
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governments
should choose a stable growth corresponded with prosperous
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society
and economy.

In summary, the
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country
should create the sustainable and successful progress in
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many
areas based on the collaborative and democratic institution and
thus
by making the
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society
more prosperity and happiness. Meanwhile, we should not neglect to invest
effectively
in
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economic
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
development
7.5Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
7.5Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
7.5Mistakes

IELTS essay By punishing murderers with the death penalty, society is also guilt of committing murder. Therefore, life in prison is a better punishment for murderers. with this statement? v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
323 words
7.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.5
  • Answer all parts of the question
  • ?
    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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