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Buying things on the Internet, such as books, air tickets and groceries, is becoming more and more popular. Do the advantages of shopping in this way outweigh the disadvantages?

Buying things on the Internet, such as books, air tickets and groceries, is becoming more and more popular. Do the advantages of shopping in this way outweigh the disadvantages? VBlYK
In recent times, technology has brought a revolutionary change to E-commerce websites by creating a line for the customers to order and book online compared to their regular shopping habits. Firstly, there are various advantages of shopping online such as, saving traveling time and instant delivery to any location. In addition to this, we have better offers on products and services such as exchange offers, discount coupon based on a festive day, no charge EMI options which are flexible to buy electronic items in small installments. Lastly, there is a standard return policy which provides better customer experience. On the other hand, this does not outcast the disadvantages. For example, there are customers who have a bad experience shopping or booking online. In fact, the products related to grocery might not be available for delivery at any point in time. Moreover, there are transaction issues while placing orders online through which the customer money is debited but the order does not get placed. Similarly, when customer places an order for books or clothes then they might have an issue with the product they received since, it is not as described product. That is, the size of the clothes or the book might not be the same as the customer has placed. To sum up, there are an equal percentage of customers who have better and worst shopping, booking experience online. However, I believe that online shopping provides a one stop platform for the customers to get all his needs of satisfactory, efficient and cost friendly services.
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change
to E-commerce websites by creating a line for the
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customers
to
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order
and book
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online
compared to their regular
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shopping
habits.

Firstly
, there are various advantages of
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shopping
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online
such as, saving traveling time and instant delivery to any location.
In addition
to this, we have better offers on
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products
and services such as exchange offers, discount coupon based on a festive day, no charge EMI options which are flexible to
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buy
electronic items in
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small
installments.
Lastly
, there is a standard return policy which provides better
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customer
experience.

On the other hand
, this does not outcast the disadvantages.
For example
, there are
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customers
who have a
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bad
experience
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shopping
or booking
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online
. In fact, the
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products
related to grocery might not be available for delivery at any point in time.
Moreover
, there are transaction issues while placing
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orders
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online
through which the
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customer
money
is debited
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but
the
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order
does not
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placed.
Similarly
, when
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customer
places an
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order
for books or clothes then they might have an issue with the
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product
they received since, it is not as
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described
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product
.
That is
, the size of the clothes or the book might not be the same as the
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customer
has placed.

To sum up, there are an equal percentage of
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customers
who have better and worst
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shopping
, booking experience
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online
.
However
, I believe that
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online
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shopping
provides a one
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stop
platform for the
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customers
to
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get
all his needs of satisfactory, efficient and cost friendly services.
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IELTS essay Buying things on the Internet, such as books, air tickets and groceries, is becoming more and more popular. Do the advantages of shopping in this way outweigh the disadvantages?

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
256 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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Grammatical Range: 6.5
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