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Buying things on the Internet, such as books, air tickets and groceries, is becoming more and more popular. Do the advantages of shopping in this way outweigh the disadvantages?

Buying things on the Internet, such as books, air tickets and groceries, is becoming more and more popular. Do the advantages of shopping in this way outweigh the disadvantages? QjXx
Nowadays purchasing on online market like, new goods and facility of traveling agency is most famous. first merit of buying online product is easy to deliver in less time periods and another benefits is campare goods with large number of data. However drowback is local market suffer less of customer. Firstly, online retailer and service provider have big network of transfore their services. They have a lot of staff to manage all product delivery fast and safe. For example, amazon has large delivery platform for their prime user and it can be done to product shipping in only one day. Another common advantages is comapare hospitality service in huge amount of data and getting best offers for services. Internet suffering large number of same data of product in just one search. We can buying ticket, groceries in the best price and big discount offers. for example, Goibio is one of the leading hotel comparision company to provide best deal of hotel booking prices. One famouse disadvantage is local market of goods and travel agencis can not selling their product easily. Customer can check the price of goods and they can order always in online. They have a small nuber of palce to store new goods for new outstanding trends. Options of all booking, reading materials, food items are very low in one shop. For example, In India 40% of all retailrs and wholesellers are close their business and many people are now jobless for that firms. In conclusion, Online startup can do the best investment in shipping chin network and provide good service for comparing price for all same product easily. However demerit is many numbers of shops are close for lack of buyer their facility.
Nowadays purchasing on
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online
market like, new
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goods
and facility of traveling agency is most
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famous
.
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first
merit of buying
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online
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product
is easy to deliver in less time periods and another benefits is
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campare
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goods
with large number of data.
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However
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drowback
is local market suffer less of customer.

Firstly
,
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online
retailer and
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service
provider have
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big
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network
of
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transfore
their
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services
. They have
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a lot of
staff to manage all
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product
delivery
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fast
and safe.

For example
,
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amazon
has large delivery platform for their prime user and it can
be done
to
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product
shipping in
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only
one day.

Another common advantages is
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comapare
hospitality
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service
in huge amount of data and getting
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best
offers for
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services
. Internet suffering large number of same data of
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product
in
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just
one search. We can
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buying
ticket, groceries in the
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best
price and
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big
discount offers.
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for
example,
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Goibio
is one of the leading hotel
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comparision
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company
to provide
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best
deal of hotel booking prices.

One
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famouse
disadvantage is local market of
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goods
and travel
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agencis
can not
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selling
their
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product
easily
. Customer can
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check
the price of
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goods and
they can
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order always
in
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online
. They have a
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small
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nuber
of
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palce
to store new
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goods
for new outstanding trends. Options of all booking, reading materials, food items are
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very
low in one shop.
For example
, In India 40% of all
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retailrs
and
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wholesellers
are close their business and
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many
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people
are
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now
jobless for that firms.

In conclusion
,
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Online
startup can do the
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best
investment in shipping chin network and provide
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good
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service
for comparing price for all same
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product
easily
.
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However
demerit is
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many
numbers of shops are close for lack of buyer their facility.
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IELTS essay Buying things on the Internet, such as books, air tickets and groceries, is becoming more and more popular. Do the advantages of shopping in this way outweigh the disadvantages?

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  American English
6 paragraphs
286 words
5.5
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