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Buying things on the Internet, such as books, air tickets and groceries, is becoming more and more popular. Do the advantages of shopping in this way outweigh the disadvantages? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience. You should write at least 250 words.

Buying things on the Internet, such as books, air tickets and groceries, is becoming more and more popular. Do the advantages of shopping in this way outweigh the disadvantages? KXl1
Buying things on internet is becoming more and more popular. Every item from a small safetypin to large electronics is present online. It is the most convinient way to shop. Online shopping gives the luxury for people to shop anywhere anytime. Also, there is a wide range of access to different types of products. It is possible to buy products that are not available in one's home land. I am experiencing the advantages of online shopping when I got no time to go to store and buy a product. I just order it at night when I get some free time. Online shopping not only saves time but money also, price comparisions can be made for same range of products and opt for the one that is of less price. We can take the case study of airlines for example. Domestic airlines cost in India was very high once as the tickets are only available through an agent. Today, the airline prices are reduced by surpassing the agent and going online. Physical store and maintance costs will be reduced which inturn provides the company with an added advantage to reduce the M. R. P on the product. We can take the example of Amazon, It is not required to set up amazon stores in every popular area of the city, as the store is present in everyone's mobile. They just maintain an inventory in every city and deliver the orders to customers. So, product will be available for less price online. Although, there is a downside to it too. Online shopping frauds are increasing everyday like Faulty products, shopping addictions, unauthorized transactions, intruding privacy, inducing malwares into the users devices through shopping websites and collecting users data. Despite of all these issues, people are opting for online shopping. To conclude, People tend to always opt for a more comfortable option like online shopping to save time and money. The advantages outweigh the issues present with online shopping, resulting in more and more people shopping online
Buying things on internet is becoming more and more popular. Every item from a
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small
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safetypin
to large electronics is present
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online
. It is the most
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convinient
way to shop.

Online
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shopping
gives the luxury for
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people
to shop anywhere anytime.
Also
, there is a wide range of access to
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different
types of
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products
. It is possible to
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buy
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products
that are not available in one's home land. I am experiencing the advantages of
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online
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shopping
when I
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got
no time to go to
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store
and
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buy
a
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product
. I
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just
order it at night when I
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get
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some
free time.

Online
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shopping
not
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only
saves time
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but
money
also
,
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price
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comparisions
can
be made
for same range of
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products
and opt for the one
that is
of less
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price
. We can take the case study of airlines
for example
. Domestic airlines cost in India was
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very
high once as the tickets are
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only
available through an agent.
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Today
, the airline
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prices
are
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reduced
by surpassing the agent and going online.

Physical
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store
and
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maintance
costs will be
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reduced
which
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inturn
provides the
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company
with an
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added
advantage to
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reduce
the M. R. P on the
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product
. We can take the example of Amazon, It is not required to set up
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amazon
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stores
in every popular area of the city, as the
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store
is present in everyone's mobile. They
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just
maintain an inventory in every city and deliver the orders to customers.
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So
,
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product
will be available for less
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price
online.

“Although” at the beginning of a sentence usually requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
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, there is a downside to it too.
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Online
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shopping
frauds are increasing everyday like Faulty
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products
,
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shopping
addictions, unauthorized transactions, intruding privacy, inducing
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malwares
into the users devices through
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shopping
websites and collecting users data.
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Despite of
all these issues,
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people
are opting for
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online
shopping.

To conclude
,
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People
tend to always opt for a more comfortable option like
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online
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shopping
to save time and money. The advantages outweigh the issues present with
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online
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shopping
, resulting in more and more
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people
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shopping
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online
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IELTS essay Buying things on the Internet, such as books, air tickets and groceries, is becoming more and more popular. Do the advantages of shopping in this way outweigh the disadvantages?

Essay
  American English
6 paragraphs
334 words
6.0
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