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Buying things on the internet, such as books ,air ticket and groceries, is becoming more and more popular do the advantage of shopping in this way outweigh the disadvantage

Buying things on the internet, such as books, air ticket and groceries, is becoming more and more popular do the advantage of shopping in this way outweigh the disadvantage 3pyb
In this present scenario, internet plays a vital role whether it is a shopping or another activities purchasing items from online like books, flight tickets and groceries items is becoming highly eminent. I ponder that prons are overlapping then the cones. On the other hand, they are 3 prominent demerits of online shopping. Firstly, it can be a chance of fraud less. In other words, it could be and chance of payments scam because a person do financial transaction while online and in that time any technical error has occurred and the money has been debited from account holder account then it is a mislaying of consumer. secondly, a buyer cannot touch the product or cannot see the quality of any dress so it would be one of the greatest drawback. lastly, Thesedays, it is not adversity to purchase products from online so number of people buy it from home and as a result, it can adversely to the health because it become an sendatary lifestyle. To epitome, in New zealand, 70% of online website is being used Tremendeous phenomena. They are pleased for the benefits of online purchasing and that is easy to buy in just one click and they are the multiple of online shopping application: Amazon, Flip card, and Ajio so No need to take huddle to go outside especially in the covid-19 pandemic period so it is an biggest prons for that. To cite an, relevant example, in Australia, in covid-19 pandemic people will not take step outside from home because what ever their want it is getting easily. Moreever, in festival days or any other special occasion this websites are declaring lot of discount and offers in which those individual can buy who and all are not offered daily. Furthermore, in different types of shopping websites they are variety types of dress in varied colours those clothes which it is difficult to get in local shop. In conclusion, although online shopping has some demerit in some cases, prons are the more than cons because nowadays works has become modern in every field.
In this present scenario, internet plays a vital role whether it is a
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
shopping
or another activities purchasing items from
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
online
like books, flight tickets and groceries items is becoming
highly
eminent. I ponder that
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prons
are overlapping then the cones.

On the other hand
, they are 3 prominent demerits of
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online
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
shopping
.
Firstly
, it can be a chance of fraud less.
In other words
, it could be and chance of payments scam
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
because
a person do financial transaction while
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online
and in that time any technical error has occurred and the money has
been debited
from account holder account then it is a mislaying of consumer.
This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
secondly
, a buyer cannot touch the product or cannot
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
see
the quality of any dress
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
so
it would be one of the greatest drawback.
This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
lastly
,
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Thesedays
, it is not adversity to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
purchase
products from
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online
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so
number of
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people
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
buy
it from home and
as a result
, it can
adversely
to the health
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
because
it
Did you mean "becomes"?
become
Use "a" instead of 'an' if the following word doesn't start with a vowel sound, e.g. 'a sentence', 'a university'
an
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sendatary
lifestyle. To epitome, in
If the term is a proper noun, use initial capitals.
New zealand
, 70% of
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online
website is being
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used
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Tremendeous
phenomena.

They are
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pleased
for the benefits of
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online
purchasing and
that is
easy to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
buy
in
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
just
one
Use a comma before 'and' if it connects two independent clauses (unless they are closely connected and short).
click and
they are the multiple of
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online
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
shopping
application: Amazon, Flip card, and
Possible spelling mistake found.
Ajio
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
so
No need to take huddle to go outside
especially
in the
Did you mean "COVID-19" or the alternative spelling "Covid-19" (= coronavirus)?
covid-19
pandemic period
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
so
it is
Use "the" with the superlative.
an
biggest
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prons
for that. To cite
Did you forget something after 'an'?
an,
relevant example, in Australia, in
Did you mean "COVID-19" or the alternative spelling "Covid-19" (= coronavirus)?
covid-19
pandemic
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
people
will not take step outside from home
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
because
what ever their want it is getting
easily
.

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Moreever
, in festival days or any other special occasion
Did you mean "these"?
this
websites are declaring
It seems that an article is missing.
lot of
discount and offers in which those individual can
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
buy
who and all are not offered daily.
Furthermore
, in
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
different
types of
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shopping
websites they are variety types of dress in varied
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colours
those clothes which it is difficult to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
get
in local shop.

In conclusion
, although
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online
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shopping
has
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some
demerit in
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some
cases,
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prons
are the more than cons
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
because
nowadays works has become modern in every field.
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IELTS essay Buying things on the internet, such as books, air ticket and groceries, is becoming more and more popular do the advantage of shopping in this way outweigh the disadvantage

Essay
  American English
5 paragraphs
347 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
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