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Briefly summarize the woman’s problem then state which solution you would recommend. Explain the reasons for your recommendation. v.1

Briefly summarize the woman’s problem then state which solution you would recommend. Explain the reasons for your recommendation. v. 1
Nowadays, masses put a lot of efforts to remain healthy so they join various fitness centres to do an exercise; however, a group of individuals say that routine actions are enough to keep the body in shape. In my opinion, gyming is important as it helps in doing the full-body workout as compared to daily actions where there is only partial movement of the body. To begin with, the gym is a specially designed health centre with many exercises which work on every part of the body. For example, there are many training drills in the gym such as pull down, dead lift, squats and bench press. All these exercises work on shoulders, upper and lower back, legs and chest respectively. These physical activities not only increase the strength of the muscles in a body but also develop it. Further, if the masses do gyming it enhances the logical and analytical skills of the people because it escalates the supply of oxygen and blood in the brain. For instance, in a survey, it was found that individuals who go to the gym have a more intelligent quotient level as compared to those who do not do it. Thus, joining a gym is necessary to keep the body fit. On the contrary, if people depend on everyday activities, it only works on certain parts of the body because in routine work they only use their arms and legs. To illustrate, when masses walk and climb stairs, there is a movement of the lower part of the body but hardly any movement of the upper part. Therefore, other parts of the body do not get trained. Besides, it does not improve any mental power because there is no increase in blood supply to the brain. Hence, has little effect on the body. To summarize, joining a gym makes people healthy and daily activities also a type of workout with limited benefits. Nevertheless, it is vital to go to health clubs to stay fit.
Nowadays, masses put
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a lot of
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they
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join
various fitness
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centres
to do an exercise;
however
, a group of individuals
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say
that routine actions are
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enough
to
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keep
the
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body
in shape. In my opinion,
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gyming
is
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important
as it
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helps
in doing the full-body workout as compared to daily actions where there is
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only
partial movement of the body.

To
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begin
with, the
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gym
is a
specially
designed health
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centre
with
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many
exercises which
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work
on every
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part
of the
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body
.
For example
, there are
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many
training drills in the
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gym
such as pull down, dead lift, squats and bench press. All these exercises
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work
on shoulders, upper and lower back, legs and chest
respectively
. These physical activities not
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only
increase the strength of the muscles in a
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body
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but
also
develop it.
Further
, if the masses do
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gyming
it enhances the logical and analytical
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skills
of the
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people
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because
it escalates the supply of oxygen and blood in the brain.
For instance
, in a survey, it
was found
that individuals who go to the
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gym
have a more intelligent quotient level as compared to those who do not do it.
Thus
, joining a
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gym
is necessary to
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keep
the
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body
fit.

On the contrary
, if
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people
depend on everyday activities, it
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only
works on certain
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parts
of the
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body
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because
in routine
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work
they
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only
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use
their arms and legs. To illustrate, when masses walk and climb stairs, there is a movement of the lower
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part
of the
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body
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but
hardly any movement of the upper
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part
.
Therefore
, other
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parts
of the
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body
do not
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get
trained.
Besides
, it does not
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improve
any mental power
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because
there is no increase in blood supply to the brain.
Hence
, has
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little
effect on the body.

To summarize
, joining a
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gym
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makes
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people
healthy and daily activities
also
a type of workout with limited benefits.
Nevertheless
, it is vital to go to health clubs to stay fit.
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IELTS essay Briefly summarize the woman’s problem then state which solution you would recommend. Explain the reasons for your recommendation. v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
331 words
7
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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