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Briefly summarize the problem the speakers are discussing. Then state which solution you would recommend. Explain the reasons for your recommendation. TPO24 Q4 v.6

Briefly summarize the problem the speakers are discussing. Then state which solution you would recommend. Explain the reasons for your recommendation. TPO24 Q4 v. 6
There are two approaches to learn about other cultures, those are either travelling to other places or watching films, reading books and browsing internet. But it is a controversial issue that travelling is essential or not. Because people are able to learn this by doing others activities and there are some logic in favour as well as in against. This essay will explore both sides, then I will give my view. On the one hand, it is not new to travelling other areas to acquire about a new culture of various people. When people roam new places that time they can realise and see that what people eat, to put on, and behaviour. They are able to perceive what is reality which they cannot feel by reading books or watching movies. To put it another way, humankinds are able to converse live with area of travelling people. For example, one of my uncles recently visited China, at this moment he was beheld several cultural people and he conversed Chinese people and learned many stuff by visiting, but he read a number of Chinese books but he didn’t learn more than visiting. As a consequence, it can be said that visiting new regions are crucial for achieving different cultures. On the other hand, despite this travelling facilities to learn several cultures. However, there are many ways to acquire overseas culture like watching films, reading books and browsing internet. Nowadays people are able to easily learn overseas cultures instead of travelling. By doing those kinds of activities people can save their valuable time as well as money due to there are a multitude of movies, and books available in the world. A good illustration of this is YouTube, there are a plethora of videos about overseas cultures, and by viewing those videos people will be able to know several cultures of people and people don’t have to pay for it. On the contrary, a traveller has to pay much money and lost many times. For this reason, i think watching movies and reading books and internet is the best way to know other cultures. And travelling is not vital for learning cultures. To conclude, although travelling has some benefits which is not acceptable against the watching films, books and internet because there are several advantages than the outing, like, saving money and time. In my honest opinion is that I completely agree with this statement.
There are two approaches to
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learn
about
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other
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cultures
, those are either
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travelling
to
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other
places or watching films,
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reading
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books
and browsing internet.
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But
it is a controversial issue that
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travelling
is essential or not.
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people
are
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able
to
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learn
this by doing others activities and there are
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some
logic in
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favour
as well
as in against. This essay will explore both sides, then I will give my view.

On the one hand, it is not
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new
to
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travelling
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other
areas to acquire about a
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new
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culture
of various
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people
. When
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people
roam
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new
places that
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time
they can
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realise
and
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see
that what
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people
eat, to put on, and
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behaviour
. They are
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able
to perceive what is reality which they cannot feel by
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reading
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books
or watching movies. To put it another way,
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humankinds
are
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able
to converse
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live
with area of
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travelling
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people
.
For example
, one of my uncles recently visited China, at this moment he was beheld several cultural
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people and
he conversed Chinese
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people
and learned
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many stuff
by visiting,
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but
he read a number of Chinese
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books
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but
he didn’t
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learn
more than visiting. As a consequence, it can
be said
that visiting
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new
regions are crucial for achieving
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different
cultures.

On the
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other
hand, despite this
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travelling
facilities to
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learn
several
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cultures
.
However
, there are
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many
ways to acquire overseas
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culture
like watching films,
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reading
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books
and browsing internet. Nowadays
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people
are
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able
to
easily
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learn
overseas
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cultures
instead
of
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travelling
. By doing those kinds of activities
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people
can save their valuable
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time
as well
as money due to there are a multitude of movies, and
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books
available in the world. A
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good
illustration of this is YouTube, there are a plethora of videos about overseas
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cultures
, and by viewing those videos
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people
will be
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able
to know several
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cultures
of
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people
and
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people
don’t
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have to
pay for it.
On the contrary
, a
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traveller
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has to
pay much money and lost
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many
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times
.
For this reason
,
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i
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think
watching movies and
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reading
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books
and internet is the best way to know
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other
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cultures
. And
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travelling
is not vital for learning cultures.

To conclude
, although
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travelling
has
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some
benefits which is not acceptable against the watching films,
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books
and internet
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because
there are several advantages than the outing, like, saving money and
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time
. In my honest opinion is that I completely
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agree
with this statement.
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7Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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IELTS essay Briefly summarize the problem the speakers are discussing. Then state which solution you would recommend. Explain the reasons for your recommendation. TPO24 Q4 v. 6

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
403 words
7
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
  • ?
    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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  • Meet the criteria
  • Doesn't meet the criteria
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