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TPO 14 - Question 5Briefly summarize the problem the speakers are discussing. Then state which solution you would recommend. Explain the reasons for your recommendation. v.1

TPO 14 - Question 5Briefly summarize the problem the speakers are discussing. Then state which solution you would recommend. Explain the reasons for your recommendation. v. 1
In many countries there is a huge income disparity among people. This is because some people are earning astronomical salaries. At the same time, there are many more who are struggling to make both ends meet. Some people, therefore, argue that the government should cap salaries. I do not agree with this view. In my opinion, this difference in salary is good for the economy because it encourages people to work harder. If there is a limit to what people can earn, most of them will lose the motivation to work harder. The reason that encourages people to work harder and harder is their yearning to earn higher salaries. Therefore, if the government caps the salaries, it will hurt the morale of employees. Also, having a small number of people who earn too much is not necessarily a bad thing. They act as an inspiration for the poor. These super-wealthy people can also start enterprises that create jobs and improve the living standards of the poor people. Of course, income disparity is not a good thing. It makes the poor feel inadequate. But at the same time, it encourages many of them to work harder and earn more. As human beings, we have a natural tendency to want more. We get inspired by the affluent lifestyle of the rich and want to be like them. This human desire to improve their living standards is the factor that drives all economies. The government can certainly do something to lessen the disparity. For example, it can impose higher taxes on rich people. It can also launch welfare schemes for the poor. By offering free education and health care for people living below the poverty line, the government can put them in a position to work and earn. To conclude, capping salaries is not the solution for income disparity. Instead, the government should empower the poor people and help them earn a good salary by offering them free education and training.
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countries there is a huge income
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disparity
among
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people
. This is
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because
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some
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people
are earning astronomical
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salaries
. At the same time, there are
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many
more who are struggling to
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make
both ends
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meet
.
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Some
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people
,
therefore
, argue that the
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government
should cap
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salaries
. I do not
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agree
with this view. In my opinion, this difference in
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salary
is
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good
for the economy
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because
it encourages
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people
to
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work
harder.

If there is a limit to what
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people
can
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earn
, most of them will lose the motivation to
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work
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harder
. The reason that encourages
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people
to
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work
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harder
and
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harder
is their yearning to
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earn
higher
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salaries
.
Therefore
, if the
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government
caps the
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salaries
, it will hurt the morale of employees.
Also
, having a
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small
number of
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people
who
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earn
too much is not
necessarily
a
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bad
thing. They act as an inspiration for the
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poor
. These super-wealthy
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people
can
also
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start
enterprises that create jobs and
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improve
the living standards of the
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poor
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people
.

Of course
, income
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disparity
is not a
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good
thing. It
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makes
the
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poor
feel inadequate.
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But
at the same time, it encourages
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many
of them to
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work
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harder
and
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earn
more. As human beings, we have a natural tendency to want more. We
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get
inspired by the affluent lifestyle of the rich and want to be like them. This human desire to
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improve
their living standards is the factor that drives all economies. The
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government
can
certainly
do something to lessen the
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disparity
.
For example
, it can impose higher taxes on rich
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people
. It can
also
launch welfare schemes for the
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poor
. By offering free education and health care for
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people
living below the poverty line, the
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government
can put them in a position to
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work
and earn.

To conclude
, capping
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salaries
is not the solution for income
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disparity
.
Instead
, the
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government
should empower the
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poor
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people
and
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help
them
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earn
a
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good
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salary
by offering them free education and training.
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IELTS essay TPO 14 - Question 5Briefly summarize the problem the speakers are discussing. Then state which solution you would recommend. Explain the reasons for your recommendation. v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
328 words
7
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
  • ?
    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
  • ?
    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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  • Meet the criteria
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