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Briefly summarize the problem the speakers are discussing. Then state which solution you would recommend. Explain the reasons for your recommendation. Q5 TPO24 v.4

Briefly summarize the problem the speakers are discussing. Then state which solution you would recommend. Explain the reasons for your recommendation. Q5 TPO24 v. 4
It is argued that preservatives and chemicals are used to process foods and packaging meals. Although there are certain advantages of this practice to retain foods for the consumers. I personally think that the disadvantages outbreaks the advantages. To begin with, there are some basic benefits of using preservatives and other chemicals as like flavour enhancers. Firstly, preservative and chemicals increase the durability of the fruits, vegetables and ready-made meals. Secondly, flavours are used to rinse the taste of the processed food such as different spices are used to create a food more delicious. In addition, preserved foods and packaging goods save the time of the consumers. Despite the advantages explained above, there are some major drawbacks of consuming packaging and ready-made foods. A significant issue that chemicals have long lasting impact on our health. These chemicals create serious diseases on the human bodies. Such as cancer and diabetes. Furthermore, preserved foods decrease the life expediency of the people. By adding preservative and chemical in foods deteriorate the fitness of the people as well as preserved foods increase the obesity among the people of the Bangladesh. To sum up, the serious health consequences outbreaks the mere advantages of long life of the foods and taste enhancement. People also deprive from the real taste of the foods. Hence, people can eat homemade meals to live in a healthy life.
It
is argued
that preservatives and
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chemicals
are
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used
to process
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foods
and packaging meals. Although there are certain advantages of this practice to retain
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foods
for the consumers. I
personally
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think
that the disadvantages outbreaks the advantages.

To
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begin
with, there are
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some
basic benefits of using preservatives and other
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chemicals
as like
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flavour
enhancers.
Firstly
, preservative and
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chemicals
increase the durability of the fruits, vegetables and ready-made meals.
Secondly
,
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flavours
are
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used
to rinse the taste of the processed
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food
such as
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different
spices are
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used
to create a
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food
more delicious.
In addition
, preserved
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foods
and packaging
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goods
save the time of the consumers.

Despite the advantages
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explained
above, there are
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some
major drawbacks of consuming packaging and ready-made
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foods
. A significant issue that
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chemicals
have
This word is normally spelled with hyphen.
long lasting
impact on our health. These
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chemicals
create serious diseases on the human bodies. Such as cancer and diabetes.
Furthermore
, preserved
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foods
decrease the life expediency of the
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people
. By adding preservative and
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chemical
in
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foods
deteriorate the fitness of the
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people
as well
as preserved
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foods
increase the obesity among the
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people
of the Bangladesh.

To sum up, the serious health consequences outbreaks the mere advantages of long life of the
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foods
and taste enhancement.
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People
also
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deprive from
the real taste of the
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foods
.
Hence
,
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people
can eat homemade meals to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
live
in a healthy life.
7Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
7Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
7Mistakes

IELTS essay Briefly summarize the problem the speakers are discussing. Then state which solution you would recommend. Explain the reasons for your recommendation. Q5 TPO24 v. 4

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
228 words
This writing has been penalized,
text can't be
less than 250 words in Task 2
and less than 150 words in Task 1
7
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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