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Blood sports have become a hot topic for debate in recent years. As society develops it is increasingly seen as an uncivilized activity and cruel to the helpless animals that are killed. All blood sports should be banned. Discuss the main arguments for this statement and give your own opinion.

Blood sports have become a hot topic for debate in recent years. As society develops it is increasingly seen as an uncivilized activity and cruel to the helpless animals that are killed. All blood sports should be banned. Discuss the main arguments for this statement and give your own opinion. VkeO
The reference of sports using animals have always existed. However, the morality of this practice is a contentious issue. Nowadays emerging society consider equal rights for animals that become victims of blood sports. I strongly believe that this kind of sport is an immoral and unethical act and ought to be banned. To begin with in several countries animals are trained specifically for fittings by people for participating in such events and bringing money in case of winning to the animal's owner. This is not a new practice, these events were part of culture. For instance, in Ancient Rome lion fights were extremely popular as an entertainment. No doubt that as now and as before animals die painfully during or after combat due to serious wounds. Fortunately, journalists, activists and the general public have become concerned about violation of animal rights and have been demanding to establish the law which prevents such activities. Since animals are dying and suffering from pain. Furthermore, blood sports are broadcasting in several countries on TV and viewers may become aggressive and violent to animals or even worse to other humans. In my opinion, it is wrong that such activities even exist and it ought to be terminated owing to the fact that it is clearly a huge crime. Moreover, I think that, authorities responsible for the welfare of animals as much as the general public, and yet authorities have legal right to stop it and to punish people who are participating in bloodsport. Bloody sports are inhuman then restrictions should apply to the owners of animals that make them fight with other animals, to sponsors and viewers of it. In conclusion, it is clearly a positive trend that people are aware of this problem. What is more, they are demanding ban on blood sports in light of the fact that it is not an acceptable activity in any country.
The reference of
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sports
using
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animals
have always existed.
However
, the morality of this practice is a contentious issue. Nowadays emerging society consider equal rights for
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animals
that become victims of blood
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sports
. I
strongly
believe that this kind of
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sport
is an immoral and unethical act and ought to
be banned
.

To
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begin
with in several countries
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animals
are trained
specifically
for fittings by
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people
for participating in such
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events
and bringing money in case of winning to the animal's owner. This is not a new practice, these
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events
were part of culture.
For instance
, in Ancient Rome lion fights were
extremely
popular as an entertainment. No doubt that as
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now
and as
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before
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animals
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die
painfully
during or after combat due to serious wounds.

Fortunately
, journalists, activists and the
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general public
have become concerned about violation of
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animal
rights and have been demanding to establish the law which
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prevents
such activities. Since
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animals
are dying and suffering from pain.
Furthermore
, blood
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sports
are broadcasting in several countries on TV and viewers may become aggressive and violent to
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animals
or even worse to other humans.

In my opinion, it is
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wrong
that such activities even exist and it ought to
be terminated
owing to the fact that it is
clearly
a huge crime.
Moreover
, I
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think
that, authorities responsible for the welfare of
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animals
as much as the
Consider using "public".
general public
, and
yet
authorities have legal right to
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stop
it and to punish
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people
who are participating in
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bloodsport
. Bloody
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sports
are inhuman then restrictions should apply to the owners of
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animals
that
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make
them fight with other
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animals
, to sponsors and viewers of it.

In conclusion
, it is
clearly
a
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positive
trend that
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people
are aware of this problem.
What is more
, they are demanding ban on blood
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sports
in light of the fact that it is not an acceptable activity in any country.
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IELTS essay Blood sports have become a hot topic for debate in recent years. As society develops it is increasingly seen as an uncivilized activity and cruel to the helpless animals that are killed. All blood sports should be banned. Discuss the main arguments for this statement and give your own opinion.

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