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Some people think that hosting an international sports event is good for the country, while some people think it is bad. Discuss both views and state your opinion. Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Some people think that hosting an international sports event is good for the country, while some people think it is bad. 5VpQ
First of all, everyone has their own opinion that varies person to person Some people says it's important to host the international sports in our country and some says it's the waste of time. Everyone has their reasons for their likes and dislikes. These reasons sometime depends on the personal experiences and sometimes the mindset of a person. As far as my opinion is concerned, I am somewhat neutral towards this topic. There are many factors that needs to be considered before concluding the topic. One of the major and the most important point is the financial stability or the country and the second most important matter is the security of the country. I will discuss and conclude the topic based on one point that actually matters when it comes to the standards. And when it comes to sports, the financial position of the country really means a lot. As we all know, arranging the international sport like olympic demands a huge amount of money and sponsorships that most of the countries cannot afford, so, financial stability always comes first. If a country is strong with it's financial statements, the international sports should be arranged. It is good for a country to host the international sports because welcoming the international sportsmen and sportswomen will definitely increase the popularity of the country which dramatically gains the respect and value. Whereas, the governement should not even think about the arrangment of a sports event if the economy is not strong. Because this can hurt the econmy even more and also defame the country's name in the world. Based on these points, I can conclude my topic in just with just a few words, that the economy should be considered first before planning the sports event in the country.
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people
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important
to host the
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international
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sports
in our
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country
and
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some
says it's the waste of time. Everyone has their reasons for their likes and dislikes. These reasons sometime depends on the personal experiences and
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the mindset of a person.

As far as my opinion
is concerned
, I am somewhat neutral towards this
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topic
. There are
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many
factors that needs to
be considered
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before
concluding the
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topic
. One of the major and the most
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important
point is the
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financial
stability or the
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country
and the second most
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important
matter is the security of the
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country
. I will discuss and conclude the
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based on one point that actually matters when it
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comes
to the standards. And when it
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to
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, the
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position of the
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country
really
means a lot. As we all know, arranging the
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international
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sport
like
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olympic
demands a huge amount of money and sponsorships that most of the
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countries
cannot afford,
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so
,
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financial
stability always
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comes
first
. If a
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country
is strong with it's
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financial
statements, the
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international
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sports
should
be arranged
.

It is
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good
for a
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country
to host the
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international
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sports
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because
welcoming the
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international
sportsmen and sportswomen will definitely increase the popularity of the
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country
which
dramatically
gains the respect and value. Whereas, the
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governement
should not even
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think
about the
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arrangment
of a
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sports
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event
if the economy is not strong.
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Because
this can hurt the
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econmy
even more and
also
defame the country's name in the world.

Based on these points, I can conclude my
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in
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with
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a few words, that the economy should
be considered
first
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before
planning the
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sports
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event
in the
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country
.
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IELTS essay Some people think that hosting an international sports event is good for the country, while some people think it is bad.

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