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Billions of dollars are spent on space research every year. Instead, this money can be used to improve living conditions of people on Earth. To what extent, do you agree or disagree

Billions of dollars are spent on space research every year. Instead, this money can be used to improve living conditions of people on Earth. To what extent, gYl1a
Up to now, money is almost used for a mixed variety of fields. It is recently more remarkable when it has been expended for the space research. However, utilizing the source of money would be effective if it is spent to ameliorate people’s living conditions which I completely agree with this opinion. There’s also having a number of students who do not have enough ability to go to school. Even though reside in 21st century, some of children in age 6-15 years old are not able to study that starting from rural to urban areas. For instance, according to 2018 report on the Internet, nearly 25% poor households can not pay enough expenses for their youngsters for studying. That was the reason why the data of well-educated students has been fall down dramatically within 4 years. In contrast, it is not only the children but also adults, they do not have a career to make sure that their life would be better as well as keep their family’s members alive. It is inevitable because a billion of dollars are being paid for luxury products, spaces and nuclear weapons. Therefore, the lack of salaries to pay for manpowers is leading to the unemployed. Meanwhile, It is considered to be a pinnacle of crisis when adults are being made redundant and children can not go to school. In conclusion, I am accord with the opinion that government should spend a certain number of money for people to improve the facilities standards and living conditions instead of paying more than billions to research.
Up to
now
, money is almost
used
for a mixed variety of fields. It is recently more remarkable when it has
been expended
for the space research.
However
, utilizing the source of money would be effective if it
is spent
to ameliorate
people
’s living conditions which I completely
agree
with this opinion.

There’s
also
having a number of students who do not have
enough
ability to go to school.
Even though
reside in 21st century,
some of children
in age 6-15 years
old
are not able to study that starting from rural to urban areas.
For instance
, according to 2018 report on the Internet,
nearly
25% poor households can not pay
enough
expenses for their youngsters for studying. That was the reason why the data of well-educated students has been fall down
dramatically
within 4 years.

In contrast
, it is not
only
the children
but
also
adults, they do not have a career to
make
sure that their life would be better
as
well as
keep
their family’s members alive. It is inevitable
because
a billion of dollars
are
being paid
for luxury products, spaces and nuclear weapons.
Therefore
, the lack of salaries to pay for
manpowers
is leading to the unemployed. Meanwhile, It
is considered
to be a pinnacle of crisis when adults are
being made
redundant and children can not go to school.

In conclusion
, I am accord with the opinion that
government
should spend a certain number of money for
people
to
improve
the facilities standards and living conditions
instead
of paying more than billions to research.
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IELTS essay Billions of dollars are spent on space research every year. Instead, this money can be used to improve living conditions of people on Earth. To what extent,

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