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Billions of dollars are being wasted each year in space research. The money could be better used to improve conditions on eart. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement v.1

Billions of dollars are being wasted each year in space research. The money could be better used to improve conditions on eart. with this statement v. 1
What is universe? Are we alone in the universe? These questions are always raised by the people to solve the puzzels of universe every year millon and billions dollars are been spent by countries. However, some people believe that money coule be immensely handy if it spend for mankind, living organism and to enhance the beauty of out planet. I partly agree with this school of thought. Many people are curious to enrich their knowledge about planets, galaxies as well as is the life exist somewhere or we are alone? . To find the appropriate answers many organizations are working together and giving their best. Moreover, space research programs are highly imperitive, in the last decade scientists resolved many mysteries such as some years ago people believed only seven galaxies are exist but with the aid of humble telescope we came to know there are enumerous galaxies, stars and planets. Furthermore, NASA(national aeronautics and soace administration) proved that money spending on space projects are worthwhile when they lainched their robot on mars surface to seek the posibilities of life overthere. For epitome, neil armstrong was the first person who landed on the surface of moon and he set the example for whole mankind On the other hand, no doubt there id advancement in science but some parts of the world people are starving and prone to famine and deing. For example, in somalia many people forced to live in worse places as a resilt of this it gives the birth of critical diseases such as ebola, coronavirus, sars etc. Even though, logging are being done on high level which is main problem of pollution and also putting the lives of animal in imperil, so the money should be given to the needy persons. Last but not least, some nations are not affluent to provide the rudimentry things to their citizens and their youngsters get deprive of educationbin order of that illetracy and poverty are rising. In conclusion, money should be spent by taking ponder whether on space research programs or for global issues but giving the money only one side is not productive both matters are vital, so i partly agree with this school of thought that money should not be spent on universe research projects
What is universe? Are we alone in the universe? These questions are always raised by the
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to solve the
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of universe every year
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millon
and billions dollars
are been
spent by countries.
However
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coule
be
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spend
for mankind, living organism and to enhance the beauty of out planet. I partly
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agree
with this school of
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thought
.

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people
are curious to enrich their knowledge about planets, galaxies
as well
as is the life exist
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somewhere or
we are alone?
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.
To find the appropriate answers
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many
organizations are working together and giving their best.
Moreover
, space research programs are
highly
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imperitive
, in the last decade scientists resolved
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many
mysteries such as
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some
years ago
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people
believed
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only
seven galaxies are
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exist
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with the aid of humble telescope we came to know there are
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enumerous
galaxies, stars and planets.
Furthermore
, NASA(national aeronautics and
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soace
administration) proved that
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money
spending on space projects are worthwhile when they
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lainched
their robot on
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posibilities
of life
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overthere
. For epitome,
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neil
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armstrong
was the
first
person who landed on the surface of
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moon and
he set the example for whole
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mankind


On the other hand
, no doubt there id advancement in science
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but
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some
parts of the world
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people
are starving and prone to famine and
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deing
.
For example
, in
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somalia
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many
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people
forced to
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live
in worse places as a
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resilt
of this it gives the birth of critical diseases such as
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ebola
, coronavirus,
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sars
etc.
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, logging are
being done
on high level which is main problem of pollution and
also
putting the
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lives
of animal in imperil,
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so
the
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money
should be
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given
to the needy persons. Last
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but
not least,
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some
nations are not affluent to provide the
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rudimentry
things to their citizens and their youngsters
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get
deprive of
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educationbin
order of that
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illetracy
and poverty are rising.

In conclusion
,
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money
should
be spent
by taking ponder whether on space research programs or for global issues
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but
giving the
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money
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only
one side is not productive both matters are vital,
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so
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i
partly
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agree
with this school of
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thought
that
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money
should not
be spent
on universe research projects
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IELTS essay Billions of dollars are being wasted each year in space research. The money could be better used to improve conditions on eart. with this statement v. 1

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