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Big salary is more important than job satisfaction. Do you agree or disagree? v.3

Big salary is more important than job satisfaction. v. 3
Many believe, earning a good wage is vital, irrespective of their job satisfaction and few thinks in an opposite way. I believe job satisfaction is more important than working without interest for a big pay because, life is to live happier and everything else is secondary. First of all, a person who enjoys job can concentrate more on his or her work, often produce better results. They may also work longer hours effectively, which in-turn helps the company growth or goodwill with the clients. For example, one of my friends joined in a small accounting firm in 2011. Even though, he is paid less, he enjoys his job and helped his employee in generating good amounts of margins than expected. On the other side, if an employee cannot work productively because of the lack of interest in his job, there are high chances of making mistakes which affect his career in the longer run. If one is happy in his job and even if salary is less, he has a chance to prove his skills and by showcasing it to the employee, they can understand the salary concerns and promote him. For example, I use to work for a very less wage while I was working back in India, my manager identifies my talent and offered me an on-site chance. From then, both work and pay wise, I am in a better position than my friends who joined along with me. To conclude, although, a bigger pay scale person may enjoy the benefits of being luxurious, without proper concentration he may make a lot of mistakes which affects his career. So I prefer to do a job I enjoy irrespective of the wage.
Many
believe, earning a
good
wage is vital, irrespective of their
job
satisfaction and few
thinks
in an opposite way
. I believe
job
satisfaction is more
important
than working without interest for a
big
pay
because
, life is to
live
happier and everything else is secondary.

First of all
, a person who
enjoys
job
can concentrate more on
his or her
work
,
often
produce better results. They may
also
work
longer hours
effectively
, which in-turn
helps
the
company
growth or goodwill with the clients.
For example
, one of my friends
joined
in a
small
accounting firm in 2011.
Even though
, he
is paid
less, he
enjoys
his
job
and
helped
his employee in generating
good
amounts of margins than
expected
.

On the other side, if an employee cannot
work
productively
because
of the lack of interest in his
job
, there are high chances of making mistakes which affect his career in the longer run. If one is happy in his
job
and even if salary is less, he has a chance to prove his
skills
and by showcasing it to the employee, they can understand the salary concerns and promote him.
For example
, I
use to
work
for a
very
less wage while I was working back in India, my manager identifies my talent and offered me an on-site chance. From then, both
work
and pay wise, I am in a better position than my friends who
joined
along with me.

To conclude
, although, a bigger pay scale person may
enjoy
the benefits of being luxurious, without proper concentration he may
make
a lot of
mistakes which affects his career.
So
I prefer to do a
job
I
enjoy
irrespective of the wage.
7Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
16Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
3Mistakes

IELTS essay Big salary is more important than job satisfaction. v. 3

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
283 words
6.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5
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Grammatical Range: 6.5
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