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better to have more youmg or older people

better to have more youmg or older people rGyko

In many countries youth comprise higher percentage of total population than elderly people. There will undoubtedly be some negative consequences of having fewer old citizens. However, In my personal opinion, the advantages of mentioned condition are more significant, as will be discussed. ‌On one hand, ‌ ‌In conclusion, I believe having large proportion of youth would result in numerous benefits such as providing better workforce and causing less expenses for community

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countries
 youth comprise higher percentage of total population than elderly This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :individualsnationsociety
people
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 citizens. However
, In my personal opinion, the advantages of mentioned condition are more significant, as will be discussed
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, I believe having large proportion of youth would result in numerous benefits such as providing better workforce and causing Did you mean "fewer"? The noun expenses is countable.fewer
less
 expenses for community