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Although people have plenty of options for their free time activities, playing sports has been a good choice for its wide-range benefits. Firstly, we are more active thanks to doing sports, which raise our stamina over time. In that way, we could have good physical bodies and more chances for healthier lives. Secondly, plenty of research shows that people who practice sports have a lower chance of a stroke, diabetes, or other illnesses. These good sides have better effects on those who have a healthy lifestyle and are well aware of their diet. Thirdly, not only our bodies but our brains are benefited by doing sports. We have our nerve functioning strengthened, resulting in good abilities to remember, react, focus. Moreover, most sports are meant to help you improve your mental state as our bodies produce more good hormones after exercise, helping us relax, reduce stress and improve our emotions. In conclusion, being a sporty person offers such benefits that everyone should have their favorite sport to play.
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choice for its wide-range benefits.
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physical bodies and more chances for healthier
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have a lower chance of a stroke, diabetes, or other illnesses. These
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. We have our nerve functioning strengthened, resulting in
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abilities to remember, react, focus.
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your mental state as our bodies produce more
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hormones after exercise, helping us relax,
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IELTS essay benefits of playing sports

Essay
  American English
1 paragraphs
168 words
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Coherence and Cohesion: 5.0
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Grammatical Range: 6.5
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