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Being creative, or careful planning which one will lead to a best solution for a problem, explain details or examples for the same. v.2

Being creative, or careful planning which one will lead to a best solution for a problem, explain details or examples for the same. v. 2
In today’s world, everyone, from a child to an adult is facing some or the other problem. A child is worried about which toy to buy or which cartoon series to watch. On the other hand, an adult person is worried about getting a job or about getting married. The point is, problems are not going to stop and one has to learn how to find a solution to them. And hence, according to me careful planning is the best approach to find a solution to any problem. Most of the times it is observed that people don’t understand what their actual problem is and because of that they face a hard time finding a solution for it. A carefully developed plan will help an individual to understand the problem in a much better way and from different perspectives and will ultimately lead to a much better solution. It is also possible that a problem might have various solutions, but which one is more optimal? Deciding this also a problem. Careful planning allows you to weigh the pros and cons of all possible solutions and thus helps in finding the most suitable solution to a problem. For example, if a company is facing a problem in deciding which from of media to use for advertising their products. To this problem, the senior analyst of the company then presented a carefully developed plan which distinguished all forms of media based on their benefits and limitations. This helped the company to take a decision and now, as a result, their product is flourishing in the market. In conclusion, problems are an inevitable part of one’s life. Instead of cribbing about them, one should take initiative to solve them and the way in which they are tackled is very important. And hence, amongst all the approaches, careful planning is the best or the most suitable one to solve a problem.
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today
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some
or the other
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problem
. A child
is worried
about which toy to
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buy
or which cartoon series to
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watch
.
On the other hand
, an adult person
is worried
about getting a job or about getting married. The point is,
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problems
are not going to
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stop
and one
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has to
learn how to find a
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solution
to them. And
hence
, according to me careful planning is the best approach to find a
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solution
to any problem.

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it
is observed
that
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people
don’t understand what their actual
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problem
is and
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because
of that they face a
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hard
time finding a
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solution
for it. A
carefully
developed plan will
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help
an individual to understand the
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problem
in a much better way and from
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different
perspectives and will
ultimately
lead to a much better solution.

It is
also
possible that a
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problem
might have various
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solutions
,
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but
which one is more optimal? Deciding this
also
a
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problem
. Careful planning
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allows
you to weigh the pros and cons of all possible
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solutions
and
thus
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helps
in finding the most suitable
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solution
to a
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problem
.
For example
, if a
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company
is facing a
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problem
in deciding which from of media to
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use
for advertising their products. To this
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
problem
, the senior analyst of the
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
company
then presented a
carefully
developed plan which distinguished all forms of media based on their benefits and limitations. This
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helped
the
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company
to take a decision and
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now
,
as a result
, their product is flourishing in the market.

In conclusion
,
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problems
are an inevitable part of one’s life.
Instead
of cribbing about them, one should take initiative to solve them and the way in which they
are tackled
is
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very
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important
. And
hence
, amongst all the approaches, careful planning is the best or the most suitable one to solve a
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problem
.
10Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
17Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
1Mistakes

IELTS essay Being creative, or careful planning which one will lead to a best solution for a problem, explain details or examples for the same. v. 2

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
317 words
6.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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