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The college year are the best time in person's lifeDo agree or disagree with this statement? Give reason's to support your opinion v.2

The college year are the best time in person's lifeDo agree or disagree with this statement? Give reason's to support your opinion v. 2
Initially, I want to talk about college life, when person enter the college allot of thing would change such as the way he spend time and how can benefit from it, I disagree with the best year would be the college year there is advantage in college year and disadvantage. in the first, the first step the person do it how can choice the major that could success in it, like me I went to enter medical school but I can' t enter it cause my grade didn' t allow to me to enter it so that I enter architecture school, there is a lot of difficulties in architecture school like I can speed a lot of time with my family, the time I should spend with them I should spend to prepare for project, I can be financial dependable I depend on my family to give me money for my project, but when I graduated I can be responsible of myself. Although in my college year I gain a lot of friend but we can spend lot time to have fun, just have time to get ready for exam of taking lecture. the college year not the best because you have to study to be ready when you are graduated you can be responsible, actually you have to be committed and take the test and to success in all exam, but when you are not committed you can have fun you can spend lot of time with friend but you still take your budget from your parents and you have limited budget, in my college I know a lot of my friend work and study and they are so success in their life. eventually the college year is the best because you have a lot of work to do you still depend on your family but lot of people consider college life the best because they have a lot of friend.
Initially
, I want to talk about college life, when person
Consider using third-person verb forms for singular and mass nouns: "enters".
enter
the college
Did you mean "a lot of" (=plenty)?
allot of
thing would
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change
such as the way he
The pronoun 'he' is usually used with a third-person or a past tense verb: "spends", "spent".
spend
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time
and how can benefit from it, I disagree with the
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best
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year
would be the college
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year
there is advantage in college
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year
and disadvantage.

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in
the
first
, the
first
step the person do it how can choice the major that could success in it, like me I went to
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enter
medical school
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but
I
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can&
#039; t
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enter
it cause my grade
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didn&
#039; t
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allow
to me to
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enter
it
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so
that I
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enter
architecture school, there is a
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lot
of difficulties in architecture school like I can speed a
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lot
of
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time
with my family, the
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time
I should
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spend
with them I should
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spend
to prepare for project, I can be financial dependable I depend on my family to give me money for my project,
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but
when I graduated I can be
The usual collocations for "responsible" is "responsible for". Did you mean "responsible for" or "in charge of"?
responsible of
myself.

Although in my college
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year
I gain a
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lot
of
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friend
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but
we can
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spend
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lot
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time
to have fun,
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just
have
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time
to
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get
ready for exam of taking lecture.

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the
college
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year
not the
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best
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because
you
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have to
study to be ready when you
are graduated
you can be responsible, actually you
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have to
be committed
and take the
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test
and to success in all exam,
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but
when you are not committed you can have fun you can
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spend
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lot of
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time
with
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friend
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but
you
still
take your budget from your parents and you have limited budget, in my college I know a
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lot
of my
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friend
work and
Use a comma before 'and' if it connects two independent clauses (unless they are closely connected and short).
study and
they are
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so
success in their life.

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eventually
the college
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year
is the
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best
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because
you have a
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lot
of work to do you
still
depend on your family
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but
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lot of
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people
consider college life the
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best
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because
they have a
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lot
of
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friend
.
4Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
39Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
14Mistakes

IELTS essay The college year are the best time in person's lifeDo agree or disagree with this statement? Give reason's to support your opinion v. 2

Essay
  American English
5 paragraphs
322 words
5.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
  • ?
    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
  • ?
    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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