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because of research priorities at academic and national level we know more about the surface of the moon than we know about the All N

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The argument talks about the reallocation of resources from space research to exploration of our oceans. The author assumes that ocean plays the central role between the two as it is known for its global transportation, food production and climate. However the evidence provided omits some Important concern needed to substantiate the argument. This alone does not constitute a logical argument in favour of the resource shift, and it certainly does not provide support or proof of the argument. First and foremost, the author’s assumption that oceans play the major role between the two researches is questionable. He fails to consider the plausibility that the presence of moon on Earth is very vital because it helps stabilise the planet through its Moderate climate. And also the moon’s gravitational pull is responsible for the tidal force in ocean’s which provides us information on high tides and low tides. Furthermore, The argument is more constrained by the words that oceans play the central role because it is responsible for climate, transportation But, moon is the only natural satellite to earth and tells us about the time, tides and light which are considered factors before making any sort of transportation through oceans study of climate would help us smoothen the process. Because the author leaves out several key issues, it is not sound or persuasive. If it included the items discussed above instead of solely Explaining the reallocation of resources from surface of moon, the argument would have been more convincing and thorough.
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argument
talks about the reallocation of resources from space research to exploration of our
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oceans
. The author assumes that
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ocean
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plays


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the
central role between the two as it
is known
for its global transportation, food production and
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climate
.
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However
the evidence provided omits
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some


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Important
concern needed to substantiate the
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argument
. This alone does not constitute a logical
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argument
in
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favour
of the resource shift, and
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it


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certainly
does not provide support or proof of the argument.

First
and foremost, the author’s assumption that
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oceans
play the major role between the two researches is questionable.

He fails to consider the plausibility that the presence of moon on Earth is
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very
vital
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because
it
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helps
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stabilise
the planet through its

Moderate
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climate
. And
also
the moon’s gravitational pull is responsible for the tidal force in
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ocean’s
which provides us information

on high tides and low tides.

Furthermore
, The
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argument
is more constrained by the words that
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oceans
play the central role
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because
it is responsible for
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climate
, transportation

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But
, moon is the
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only
natural satellite to earth and
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tells
us about the time, tides and light which
are considered
factors
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before


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making
any sort of transportation through
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oceans
study of
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climate
would
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help
us smoothen the process.

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Because
the author
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leaves
out several key issues, it is not sound or persuasive. If it included the items discussed above
instead
of
solely


Explaining the reallocation of resources from surface of moon, the
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argument
would have been more convincing and thorough.
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IELTS essay because of research priorities at academic and national level we know more about the surface of the moon than we know about the All N

Essay
  American English
9 paragraphs
250 words
5.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.0
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  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 5.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.0
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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