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bad behaviour. causes and solutions?

bad behaviour. causes and solutions? rGVyk
It is true that the behaviour of school pupils in some parts of the world has been getting worse in recent years. There are a variety of possible reasons for this, but steps can definitely be taken to tackle the problem. In my opinion, three main factors are to blame for the way young people behave at school nowadays. Firstly, modern parents tend to be too lenient or permissive. Many children become accustomed to getting whatever they want, and they find it difficult to accept the demands of teachers or the limits imposed on them by school rules. Secondly, if teachers cannot control their students, there must be an issue with the quality of classroom management training or support within schools. Finally, children are influenced by the behaviour of celebrities, many of whom set the example that success can be achieved without finishing school. Student behaviour can certainly be improved. I believe that the change must start with parents, who need to be persuaded that it is important to set firm rules for their children. When children misbehave or break the rules, parents should use reasonable punishments to demonstrate that actions have consequences. Also, schools could play an important role in training both teachers and parents to use effective disciplinary techniques, and in improving the communication between both groups. At the same time, famous people, such as musicians and football players, need to understand the responsibility that they have to act as role models to children. In conclusion, schools will continue to face discipline problems unless parents, teachers and public figures set clear rules and demonstrate the right behaviour themselves.
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pupils in
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parts of the world has been getting

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worse
in recent years. There are a variety of possible reasons for this,
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but
steps
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can


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definitely
be taken
to tackle the problem.

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people
behave at
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school
nowadays.
Firstly
, modern
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parents
tend to be too lenient or permissive.
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Many
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children
become accustomed to getting whatever they want, and they find it difficult to accept the demands of
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teachers
or the limits imposed on them by
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school
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rules
.
Secondly
, if
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teachers
cannot control their students, there
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must
be an issue with the quality of classroom management training or support within
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schools
.
Finally
,
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children
are influenced
by the
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behaviour
of celebrities,
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many
of whom set the example that success can
be achieved


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without
finishing school.

Student
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behaviour
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improved
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parents
, who need to
be persuaded
that it is
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important
to set firm
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rules
for their
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children
. When
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children
misbehave or break the
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rules
,
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parents
should
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use
reasonable punishments to demonstrate that actions have consequences.
Also
,
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schools
could play an
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important
role in training both
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teachers
and
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parents
to
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use
effective disciplinary techniques, and in improving the communication between both groups. At the same time,
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famous
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people
, such as musicians and football players, need to understand the responsibility that they
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have to
act as role models to children.

In conclusion
,
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schools
will continue to face discipline problems unless
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parents
,
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teachers
and public figures set
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clear
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rules
and demonstrate the right
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behaviour
themselves.
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IELTS essay bad behaviour. causes and solutions?

Essay
  American English
8 paragraphs
270 words
5.5
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Coherence and Cohesion: 5.0
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