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At universities in some countries, it is common for students, especially for those who have no scholarship, to have jobs while they study. They may work in offices, at the library, in labs or as teachers’ assistants. They earn money for living expenses and sometimes receive a reduction in tuition as well. Is this a good idea? Support your opinion with specific reasons and details.

At universities in some countries, it is common for students, especially for those who have no scholarship, to have jobs while they study. They may work in offices, at the library, in labs or as teachers’ assistants. They earn money for living expenses and sometimes receive a reduction in tuition as well. Is this a good idea? Support your opinion with specific reasons and details. qVa7r
It is true that the stuents prefer to work during study period remains a controversy in the education field. While this issue is fit to somebody, I totally agree that student should concentrate on academy study with noticeable exception that their family couldn’t give him essential expenditure fee. On the one hand, there are a variety of reasons why working in university is beneficial. Firstly, it is absolute correct that by working students will be able to earn money from his jobs, and since they will likely be mature enough. Secondly, throughout working, student who has to work may obtain a lot of experience and skill such as communication skill, schedule control which student do not touch in classroom. By working, the important factor which student obtains that they will reduce the gap between theory and reality, it had better if the part-time job are closed to the their speciality such as computer scientist student should seek a job in computer shop or press student trying to be a collaborator of newspapers. On the other hand, there are some disadvantages to take into consideration before working. Firstly, the part-time job accounted for a significant free time which use for homework and self-research, consequently, student spend no time to focus on studying it lead to the score decline. Furthermore, another problem is health. When working two or more jobs, student do not have enough time to relax and enjoy, during long period the body will get sick. From what has been discussed above I can draw the conclusion that student should not had a part-time job unless they get in financial troubles.
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prefer to work during study period remains a controversy in the education field. While this issue
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totally
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student
should concentrate on academy study with noticeable exception that their family couldn’t give him essential expenditure fee.

On the one hand, there are a variety of reasons why
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working
in university is beneficial.
Firstly
, it is absolute correct that by
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working
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students
will be able to earn money from his
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jobs
, and since they will likely be mature
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enough
.
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, throughout
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working
,
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student
who
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has to
work may obtain
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a lot of
experience and
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skill
such as communication
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skill
, schedule control which
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student
do not touch in classroom. By
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working
, the
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important
factor which
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student
obtains that they will
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reduce
the gap between theory and reality, it had better if the part-time
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job
are closed
to
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the their speciality
such as computer scientist
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student
should seek a
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job
in computer shop or press
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student
trying to be a collaborator of newspapers.

On the other hand
, there are
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some
disadvantages to take into consideration
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before
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working
.
Firstly
, the part-time
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job
accounted for a significant free time which
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use
for homework and self-research,
consequently
,
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student
spend no time to focus on studying it lead to the score decline.
Furthermore
, another problem is health. When
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working
two or more
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jobs
,
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student
do not have
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enough
time to relax and enjoy, during long period the body will
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get
sick.

From what has
been discussed
above I can draw the conclusion that
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student
should not
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had
a part-time
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job
unless they
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get
in financial troubles.
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IELTS essay At universities in some countries, it is common for students, especially for those who have no scholarship, to have jobs while they study. They may work in offices, at the library, in labs or as teachers’ assistants. They earn money for living expenses and sometimes receive a reduction in tuition as well. Is this a good idea? Support your opinion with specific reasons and details.

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