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At the present time, the population of some countries includes a relatively large number of young adults, compared with the number of older people. Do the advantages of this situation outweigh the disadvantages?

At the present time, the population of some countries includes a relatively large number of young adults, compared with the number of older people. Do the advantages of this situation outweigh the disadvantages? axAw
The importance of adults and younger people in a country which is always debatable has now become more controversial. The population of country consistent of children, adults and older people which play their own significant role in society and have some pros and cons as well. In my opinion, advantages of having more youngsters overlap the disadvantages. This essay will highlights the brighter and darker side of this trend and further needs scrutinization before forming a view point.
The importance of adults and younger
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people
in a country which is always debatable has
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now
become more controversial. The population of country consistent of children, adults and older
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people
which play their
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own
significant role in society and have
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some
pros and cons
as well
. In my opinion, advantages of having more youngsters overlap the disadvantages. This essay will
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highlights
the brighter and darker side of this trend and
further
needs scrutinization
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before
forming a view point.

IELTS essay At the present time, the population of some countries includes a relatively large number of young adults, compared with the number of older people. Do the advantages of this situation outweigh the disadvantages?

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  American English
1 paragraphs
78 words
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