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At present day there are many chances for women than there were in the past .Most people think that this situation has caused more problems than it has solved For example fifty years ago when woman is unemployed. They only take care of

At present day there are many chances for women than there were in the past. Most people think that this situation has caused more problems than it has solved For example fifty years ago when woman is unemployed. They only take care of 6lNe8
At present day there are many chances for women than there were in the past. Most people think that this situation has caused more problems than it has solved For example fifty years ago when woman is unemployed. They only take care of childern But nowadays there are more and more opportunities for woman the government created different jobs for them. For instance woman as men become businessman. But they are also businesswomen. Also, more and more women are going to university and woman are joining professions that were traditionally male, such as architecture pr engineering. I think that it is important that women can choose the life they want do not choose lifestyle. Consequence they like to work If they choose that they want and they feel excited Even so, woman can do anything that male do as an example my aunt is a businesswomen. She organised a big company. Before my aunt was unemployee but, there are opportunities for women due to my aunt choose it. Now she find respect in society. In addition, she is responsible at work. first of all, everybody criticized her but my aunt do not changed his decision and she is proud of himself. Because my aunt achieve himself invent. Some people think that this situation has caused more problems than it solved I do not think it problem. because if women stayed at home when they suffered in life In conclusion, I think that there alot of chances now. it is a good thing for women and also society.
At present day there are
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chances for
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than there were in the past. Most
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people
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that this situation has caused more problems than it has solved
For example
fifty years ago when
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woman
is unemployed
. They
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take care of
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childern


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But
nowadays there are more and more opportunities for
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woman
the
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government
created
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different
jobs for them.
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woman
as
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men
become businessman.
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they are
also
businesswomen.
Also
, more and more
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women
are going to university and
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are joining professions that were
traditionally
male, such as architecture pr engineering.

I
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think
that it is
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important
that
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women
can
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choose
the life they
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want do
not
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choose
lifestyle. Consequence they like to work If they
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choose
that they
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want and
they feel
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excited


Even
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,
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can do anything
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that male do
as an example my
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aunt
is
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a businesswomen
. She
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organised
a
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big
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.
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my
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aunt
was
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unemployee
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but
, there are opportunities for
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women
due to my
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aunt
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choose
it.
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she
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find
respect in society.
In addition
, she is responsible at work.
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first of all
, everybody criticized her
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my
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do not
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his
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decision and
she is proud of himself.
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my
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aunt
achieve himself invent.

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Some
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people
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think
that this situation has caused more problems than it solved

I do not
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think
it problem.
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because
if
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women
stayed at home when they suffered in
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life


In conclusion
, I
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think
that there
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alot
of chances
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now
.
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it
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thing for
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women
and
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society.
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IELTS essay At present day there are many chances for women than there were in the past. Most people think that this situation has caused more problems than it has solved For example fifty years ago when woman is unemployed. They only take care of

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  American English
7 paragraphs
257 words
5.5
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Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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