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As there is increasing unemployment in the world, while at the same time those who have jobs are working harder and harder, it would be better to have a four-day working week for everyone, and so to create more jobs. In what extent do you agree or disagree?

As there is increasing unemployment in the world, while at the same time those who have jobs are working harder and harder, it would be better to have a four-day working week for everyone, and so to create more jobs. In what extent qV07w
There is an outbreak of unemployment rates in the recent year. to find a solution it is commonly suggested that implementing a four-day working week per person would dramatically reduce unemployment rates by creating enough work for everyone. I completely disagree with this point of view, as I believe splitting a work can cause less progress, while also leaving many individuals below poverty line First of all, individuals are responsible in performing their operations. when a single operation is divided among sevral employees, it becomes complicate which results in less progress acheived in maximum time. For instance, when a sole employee is responsible in creating an app which usually takes atleast a month to finish it, in this case when a single operation is divided it results in confusion on where to start and often breaches the deadline for the project to finish. Furthermore, employees working under a four-week program can be affected from financial status as well. When an employee's work is distributed it also means his salary is also being splitted, which leaves him in poor financial aid. For instance, when a worker is earning enough to satisfy his hunger, with the new working restrictions salary would be half of his previous earning and has to compromise in various lifestyles in order to finacially support himself or his family. In conclusion, distrubuting jobs equally among people can cause less progress and also leavess an indivuidual in compramising their lifestyle.
There is an outbreak of unemployment rates in the recent year.
to
find a solution it is
commonly
suggested that implementing a four-day working week per person would
dramatically
reduce
unemployment rates by creating
enough
work for everyone. I completely disagree with this point of view, as I believe splitting a work can cause less progress, while
also
leaving
many
individuals below poverty
line


First of all
, individuals are responsible in performing their operations.
when
a single operation
is divided
among
sevral
employees, it becomes complicate which results in less progress
acheived
in maximum time.
For instance
, when a sole employee is responsible in creating an app which
usually
takes
atleast
a month to finish it,
in this case
when a single operation
is divided
it results in confusion on where to
start
and
often
breaches the deadline for the project to finish.

Furthermore
, employees working under a four-week program can be
affected
from financial status
as well
. When an employee's work
is distributed
it
also
means his salary is
also
being
splitted
, which
leaves
him in poor financial aid.
For instance
, when a worker is earning
enough
to satisfy his hunger, with the new working
restrictions
salary would be half of his previous earning and
has to
compromise in various lifestyles in order to
finacially
support himself or his family.

In conclusion
,
distrubuting
jobs
equally
among
people
can cause less progress and
also
leavess
an
indivuidual
in
compramising
their lifestyle.
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IELTS essay As there is increasing unemployment in the world, while at the same time those who have jobs are working harder and harder, it would be better to have a four-day working week for everyone, and so to create more jobs. In what extent

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