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As the population grow and cities become more crowded, there is lots of pressure to build buildings up words rather then side ways.

As the population grow and cities become more crowded, there is lots of pressure to build buildings up words rather then side ways. BW1Ew
As the population grow and cities become more crowded, there is lots of pressure to build buildings up words rather then side ways. The main advantage of building taller buildings is the use use of land. A significantly more people could accommodate in a small space of land. It makes the cost of living less. It could also decrees the cutting of forest as less land is needed. Due to taller buildings the distance is shortened and people can travel less to reach their destinations. It could decrees the stress and improve work capacity. Besides the advantages there are some group of people which still believe that building side ways is better then going upwards. This people think they are trapped and lost from the nature. The tall skyscrapers could scare lots of people due to dangerous architecture. I understand the problem of this people but I am with the idea of building skyscrapers because the population is increasing there is no other way to solve the problem.
As the population grow and cities become more crowded, there is lots of pressure to build
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buildings
up words
rather
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then
side ways.

The main advantage of
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building
taller
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buildings
is the
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use
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use
of land. A
significantly
more
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people
could accommodate in a
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small
space of land. It
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makes
the cost of living less. It could
also
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decrees
the cutting of forest as less land
is needed
.

Due to taller
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buildings
the distance
is shortened
and
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people
can travel less to reach their destinations. It could
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decrees
the
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stress
and
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improve
work capacity.

Besides
the advantages there are
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some
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group
of
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people
which
still
believe that
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building
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side
ways is
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better then
going upwards. This
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people
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think
they
are trapped
and lost from the nature. The tall skyscrapers could scare lots of
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people
due to
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dangerous
architecture. I understand the problem of this
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people
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but
I am with the
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idea
of
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building
skyscrapers
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because
the population is increasing there is no other way to solve the problem.

IELTS essay As the population grow and cities become more crowded, there is lots of pressure to build buildings up words rather then side ways.

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  American English
4 paragraphs
168 words
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