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As most people spend a major part of their life at work, job satisfaction is an important element of individual wellbeing. What factor contributes to job satisfaction? How realistic is the expectation of job satisfaction for all workers? v.3

As most people spend a major part of their life at work, job satisfaction is an important element of individual wellbeing. What factor contributes to job satisfaction? How realistic is the expectation of job satisfaction for all workers? v. 3
Since majority of people spend their considerable amount of their time at a work, job satisfaction has become instrumental in the well-being of an individual. Pride, self-respect and appreciation are some of the reasons for job fulfilment, while getting it in reality is a far away dream for fewer staff, because of the unemployment and the need of money to feed the family. Employees get work fulfilment in a number of ways, to begin with, a job is more than a pay cheque, which needs to be a source of pride and self-respect. Additionally, feeling valued, valuable work, positive feedback and training opportunities develop skills, that regard to sense of progression and purpose that reward a worker. Furthermore, a sense of belonging to a team or working community also adds to a work satisfaction, as colleagues help each other while enjoy working lives. For example, according to the recent survey, 80% people agreed that they would stick to a job if valued by manager and offers opportunities to progress. However, hard economic realities means many people have a little choice for getting a right job. In the same cases an employee is working in a work that suit neither to their skills nor to their personality. Furthermore, the money earned is just enough to pay their living expenses, which often mean going through periods of discontentment. For instance, a poll online stated the 70% of people would leave a job, if it were not for money. In conclusion, even though it is unlikely for everyone feeling content with a job, it is not unrealistic to promote job satisfaction in any field. If above factors are implemented, any job can be improved to create greater degrees of job fulfilment.
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majority of
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people
spend their considerable amount of their time at a
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work
,
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job
satisfaction has become instrumental in the well-being of an individual. Pride, self-respect and appreciation are
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some of the
reasons for
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, while getting it in reality is a far away dream for fewer staff,
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of the unemployment and the need of money to feed the family.

Employees
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get
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work
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in a number of ways, to
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begin
with, a
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job
is more than a pay
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, which needs to be a source of pride and self-respect.
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, feeling valued, valuable
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work
,
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positive
feedback and training opportunities develop
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skills
, that regard to sense of progression and purpose that reward a worker.
Furthermore
, a sense of belonging to a team or working community
also
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adds
to a
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satisfaction, as colleagues
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help
each other while enjoy working
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lives
.
For example
, according to the recent survey, 80%
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people
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agreed
that they would stick to a
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job
if valued by manager and offers opportunities to progress.

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,
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hard
economic realities means
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many
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people
have a
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little
choice for getting a right
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job
. In the same cases an employee is working in a
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work
that suit neither to their
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skills
nor to their personality.
Furthermore
, the money earned is
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just
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enough
to pay their living expenses, which
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often
mean going through periods of discontentment.
For instance
, a poll online stated the 70% of
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people
would
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leave
a
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job
, if it were not for money.

In conclusion
,
even though
it is unlikely for everyone feeling content with a
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job
, it is not unrealistic to promote
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job
satisfaction in any field. If above factors
are implemented
, any
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job
can be
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improved
to create greater degrees of
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job
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fulfilment
.
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IELTS essay As most people spend a major part of their life at work, job satisfaction is an important element of individual wellbeing. What factor contributes to job satisfaction? How realistic is the expectation of job satisfaction for all workers? v. 3

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
288 words
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Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 8.0
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  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 8.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 8.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 8.0
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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