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As most people spend a major part of their life at work, job satisfaction is an important element of individual wellbeing. What factors contribute to job satisfaction? How realistic is the expectation of job satisfaction for all workers? v.1

As most people spend a major part of their life at work, job satisfaction is an important element of individual wellbeing. What factors contribute to job satisfaction? How realistic is the expectation of job satisfaction for all workers? v. 1
A large number of 19-65 aged people spend a considerable amount of their time for making a living. To certain extend, it is clear that task contaminant plays vital role of adults’ well-being. The one of the causes of this appear to be focused on work condition has huge effects regardless of any company. In the rest of the essay is discussed reasons. Undoubtedly, workplaces are ran by authentic and special rules, which are formed relations among workers, employers and others. Job satisfaction accumulates loads of reasons. The origin of this situation seems to stem from 3 essential facts: economic, social and mental satisfaction. People may be better off whether they choose and launch performance split by own skill set. It is crystal clear and no point hard-workers devote high-pay scale in return of studious facility. Except for workers main point ıs to make them happy. Moreover affectionate job condition is able to motivate workers in the same regards it aids to bond them together. The worker could be inspired to reach, to start endeavour with beloved staff and do effort cooperatively. Out of these options worker’s mental contamination necessitates to do job willingly and make the job interesting, useful. Despite other factors, If the person’s skill or desire do not match occupation he or she would have less chance to be satisfied. That is why people should make a good atmosphere in workplace by themselves too. Other factors could count such concession, competitive condition and so on. The Whole world is not under the same roof. A significant number of people may not be satisfied with their work and it means they have not well-being through a job. Hence this fact should not deny the job satisfaction as the matter of well-being. For instance, if any person earns well enough and have a kind, straightforward stuff, furthermore aims to get appraised. How do we claim it is not well-being? It would be totally unsound. In the sum up, being motivated economically, mentally, socially is a method and a way to keep individual well-being in workplaces.
Specify a number, remove phrase, or simply use "many" or "numerous"
A large number of
19-65 aged
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people
spend a considerable amount of their time for making a living. To certain
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extend
, it is
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
clear
that task contaminant plays vital role of adults’
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
well-being
. The one of the causes of this appear to
be focused
on work condition has huge effects regardless of any
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
company
. In the rest of the essay
is discussed
reasons.

Undoubtedly
, workplaces are
Consider using a past participle here: "run".
ran
by authentic and special
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
rules
, which
are formed
relations among
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workers
, employers
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and others
.
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Job
satisfaction accumulates loads of reasons. The origin of this situation seems to stem from 3 essential facts: economic, social and mental satisfaction.
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
People
may be better off whether they choose and launch performance split by
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
own
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
skill
set. It is crystal
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
clear
and no point
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
hard
-workers devote high-pay scale in return of studious facility.
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Except for
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workers
main point
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ıs
to
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make
them happy.
Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Moreover
affectionate
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job
condition is able to motivate
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workers
in the same regards it aids to bond them together. The
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worker
could
be inspired
to reach, to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
start
Possible spelling mistake. 'endeavour' is British English.
endeavour
with beloved staff and do effort
cooperatively
. Out of these options
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worker’s
mental contamination necessitates to do
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job
willingly
and
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
make
the
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job
interesting, useful. Despite other factors, If the person’s
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
skill
or desire do not match occupation he or she would have less chance to
be satisfied
.
That is
why
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people
should
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
make
a
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
good
atmosphere in workplace by themselves too. Other factors could count such concession, competitive condition and
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
so
on.

The Whole world is not under the same roof. A significant number of
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
people
may not
be satisfied
with their work and it means they have not
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
well-being
through a
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
job
.
Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Hence
this fact should not deny the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
job
satisfaction as the matter of
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
well-being
.
For instance
, if any person earns well
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
enough
and have a kind, straightforward stuff,
furthermore
aims to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
get
appraised. How do we claim it is not
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
well-being
? It would be
totally
unsound.

In the sum up,
being motivated
economically
, mentally,
socially
is a method and a way to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
keep
individual
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
well-being
in workplaces.
7.5Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
7.5Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
7.5Mistakes

IELTS essay As most people spend a major part of their life at work, job satisfaction is an important element of individual wellbeing. What factors contribute to job satisfaction? How realistic is the expectation of job satisfaction for all workers? v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
346 words
7.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.5
  • Answer all parts of the question
  • ?
    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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