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As most people spend a major part of their adult life at work, job satisfaction is an important element of individual wellbeing. What factors contribute to job satisfaction? How realistic is the expectation of job satisfaction for all workers? v.24

As most people spend a major part of their adult life at work, job satisfaction is an important element of individual wellbeing. What factors contribute to job satisfaction? How realistic is the expectation of job satisfaction for all workers? v. 24
It is not inappropriate to say that everyone study, play and develop themselves for a day when they get a suitable job. The more essential job becomes, the more concerns job satisfaction gets. In my opinion, factors contributed to it and how realistic its expectations for every employee should be considered. There are two main factors affecting job satisfaction. First, the salary for a job is very important. It is often the first reason, and concern of an employee applying for a position. Both fixed and bonus payments for extra work can boost workers’ interest and efficiency. Secondly, the working environment has a huge impact on job satisfaction. It consists of both the people we work with and the environment condition. For example, having supportive, funny, and intelligent bosses or colleges is undoubtedly comfortable. Moreover, the quality of the infrastructure or the air can also change workers’ attitudes. Regarding the above factors, job satisfaction cannot be expected by everyone. However, this expectation depends on some factors. First, it is the employees’ own ability to have a well-paid and dream job. In particular, it is their knowledge, experience, life skills and personalities. Obviously, if employees cannot meet the job’s requirements, they are discarded. Furthermore, the chance to get access to smart and suitable employers also play a necessary part. In fact, there is often an employment day for final-year students, but only in some well-known universities. Therefore, employees themselves have to actively improve their quality and spend more time and effort researching employers and job descriptions. In conclusion, to have a full job satisfaction, employees should consider the salary and working environment carefully. Moreover, they need to enhance themselves to meet their expectation at work.
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get
a suitable
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job
. The more essential
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job
becomes, the more concerns
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job
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satisfaction
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gets
. In my opinion,
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factors
contributed to it and how realistic its expectations for every
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employee
should
be considered
.

There are two main
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factors
affecting
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job
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satisfaction
.
First
, the salary for a
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job
is
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very
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important
. It is
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often
the
first
reason, and concern of an
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employee
applying for a position. Both
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fixed
and bonus payments for extra work can boost workers’ interest and efficiency.
Secondly
, the working environment has a huge impact on
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job
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satisfaction
. It consists of both the
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people
we work with and the environment condition.
For example
, having supportive,
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funny
, and intelligent bosses or colleges is
undoubtedly
comfortable.
Moreover
, the quality of the infrastructure or the air can
also
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change
workers’ attitudes.

Regarding the above
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factors
,
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job
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satisfaction
cannot be
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expected
by everyone.
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, this expectation depends on
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some
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factors
.
First
, it is the
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employees’
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own
ability to have a well-paid and dream
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job
.
In particular
, it is their knowledge, experience, life
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skills
and personalities.
Obviously
, if
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employees
cannot
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meet
the
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job’s
requirements, they
are discarded
.
Furthermore
, the chance to
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get
access to smart and suitable employers
also
play a necessary part. In fact, there is
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often
an employment day for final-year students,
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but
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only
in
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some
well-known universities.
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,
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employees
themselves
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have to
actively
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improve
their quality and spend more time and effort researching employers and
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job
descriptions.

In conclusion
, to have a full
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job
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satisfaction
,
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employees
should consider the salary and working environment
carefully
.
Moreover
, they need to enhance themselves to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
meet
their expectation at work.
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26Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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IELTS essay As most people spend a major part of their adult life at work, job satisfaction is an important element of individual wellbeing. What factors contribute to job satisfaction? How realistic is the expectation of job satisfaction for all workers? v. 24

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
284 words
6.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
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  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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